Talk:Anthems (Anthrax EP)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 07:53, 22 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be taking care of this one. Review to follow soon. Moswento ^talky 07:53, 22 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Close paraphrasing[edit]

Before I actually do a proper review of this article, there is a serious problem with close paraphrasing (or in some cases wholesale copying). I've listed a few examples in the table below, although I have not checked if this list is exhaustive. Please can you address this issue before I continue with the review - and by checking, I mean checking every sentence in the article, not just what I've listed in the table. Moswento ^talky 08:20, 22 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Source	Article
mostly recorded in 2012 all over the world: at Benante's home studio, in Ruston's New York studio, on the band's tour bus	The album was recorded in 2012 at different locations: at Benante's home studio, in Ruston's New York studio and during tour.
The original idea was to record a few songs that could go with a deluxe “tour edition” of the group’s latest album, 2011′s Worship Music, but it couldn’t get it together in time.	The original idea was to record a few songs that would have been placed on a deluxe edition of their previous album, but the band didn't manage to finish the project in time
When the group realized how many songs it had, it reached out to its U.S. and European labels who offered to put out Anthems as a stand-alone EP	when the band had recorded enough songs, they reached out to their US and European labels who offered to put out Anthems as a stand-alone EP
Benante and artist Stephen Thompson have subtly redesigned each track’s original album cover art to "Anthrax" it.	Benante and artist Stephen Thompson have subtly redesigned each track’s original album cover art to “Anthrax” it.
classic 1970s rock bands that influenced them	classic 1970s rock bands that influenced Anthrax.
The first track released from Anthems was the cover of Rush’s “Anthem,” which received some critical feedback from critics.	The first track released from the EP was the cover of Rush’s "Anthem", which received some positive feedback from music critics.
Drummer Charlie Benante explained about their selection of the Boston song,	Drummer Charlie Benante explained the selection of the Boston song

If I understood you right, I should copy the sentences from the sources word-to-word as they appear there?--Вик Ретлхед (talk) 12:21, 22 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

No, the exact opposite. At the moment, there are a number of sentences that are very close or identical to the wording of the source. This constitutes plagiarism. All such sentences need to be edited so that they are written in your own words, with your own sentence structures, rather than in the words and sentence structures of the sources. Moswento ^talky 13:06, 22 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Checked the other sentences in the "Reception" section, they look fine to me. Fixed four of the above mentioned, except for #4 and #6. Would appreciate some suggestions.--Вик Ретлхед (talk) 15:28, 22 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I don't see how anything has been "fixed"? The article is pretty much just in the same state as when I posted my comments above. Moswento ^talky 07:35, 25 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Well then, you can close the review as failed since I don't have an idea how to re-word the rest of the text. I hope it is higher than Start-class in its current condition.--Вик Ретлхед (talk) 14:30, 25 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]