Talk:Hook Me Up (The Veronicas song)/GA1

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 03:43, 27 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from AJona1992

According to this report, there is one WP:DABLINK
Infobox: "Released" needs a {{start date}} template
Infobox: "Length" needs a {{duration}} template
Infobox: Unlink Australia
"Hook Me Up" is a song by Australian duo The Veronicas for their second album, Hook Me Up. ---> "Hook Me Up" is a song recorded by Australian duo The Veronicas for their second album of the same name.
Wikilink lead single, down-tempo, key, beat, samples, hook, chorus
"lead single in late 2007 in Australia" - no, give us the date it was release
"The Secret Life Of..." - and this was released on? (year of release)
"dance-floor friendly sound" - sounds orish, if this is a quote then it needs to be presented as such
Too many sentences have "the song" and "the single" - needs a variety
The single was influenced the electropop songs of underground bands in Los Angeles, whose sound The Veronica's were keen to incorporate into their own music. - add "by" before "the electropop"
The song is set in common time and in the key of G minor. with an energy filled fast tempo of 134 beats per minute - (1) what is up with the period after G minor? (2) "with an energy filled" sounds orish (3) fast tempo is not the same as downtempo, I hope you do know that. So this contradicts what other sentences say in the article. Which is it? downtempo or fast tempo (which needs to be changed to uptempo).
Electropop (is wikilinked twice), Australia (is wikilinked twice, unlink them both)
FN#7's sentence is missing a period
"for the issue date 7 October 2007" - remove
"The song received platinum status by the ..." ---> "The song was certified platinum by the ..."
On the ARIA end of year charts "Hook Me Up" ranked at number twenty two. - remove "at"
FN#17 goes after the comma
"after a sexy concept" - was this from a quote? If not, its orish, if it is it needs to be presented as such
File:Hook Me Up audio sample by The Veronicas.ogg needs a "further rational" section. Look at File:Amor Prohibido.ogg as an example
Please fix these concerns before I do a spotcheck and a reference check. Happy holidays, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 03:43, 27 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Reference checking

FN#6 Contactmusic.com does not need to be in italics. To force this simply add '' '' to the work field
FN#7 as well as above (Sputnikmusic.com)
FN#9 Is it "Accessed" or "Retrieved"? Be consistent
FN#10, FN#12, FN#16, FN#30 and FN#31 same as FN#6
FN#14 publisher?
FN#19 YouTube is discouraged to be used, unless you can provide a persuasive reasoning on why it should be cited? (In other words, can you find another source on the web such as google.news or google.books?)
FN#20, FN#27 DO NOT SHOUT! Do not capitalize titles, even if websites present themselves as such
FN#27 is not a reliable source, you need to replace it with a reliable one
FN#28 wikilink Apple Inc

I copy edited some sentences of the article but please fix these and the article passes. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 03:49, 28 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. I have fixed the links. As for FN#19, I cannot find a reliable source online which will show the performance, other than the one that is listed. I have removed FN#27 because I can only find it on YouTube and if that isn't reliable then I will remove the bit about "Video Hits" altogether. I was also wondering how I could go about getting a screen cap of the music video without violating any rules. Thanks again DonEd (talk) 07:45, 28 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from shaidar cuebiyar

I've tried to improve the overall expression and referencing of this article.
I supplied a new sound sample with reduced length (to 10%) and quality (Vorbis = 0) per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Music samples. By replacing [[File:Hook Me Up audio sample by The Veronicas.ogg]], which is now due to be deleted as no longer being used.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 08:59, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your work on this article which improved. Will pass, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 15:29, 2 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]