Talk:Out Loud (song)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 08:01, 5 July 2019 (UTC)

Last few reviews have taken a while to get proper responses to for reasons that you can see if you look on the discussions. I will get to doing this one today, hoping there's not similar issues. --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:01, 5 July 2019 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lead

• Add 2017 as the recorded year as the first section mentions how work began in July
• "independently released on September 6, 2017 as her debut single." → "independently released for digital download on September 6, 2017 as her debut single."
• "The lyrics of "Out Loud"," → "The lyrics of the track,"
• "been described as emotive, discussing on themes" → "been described as emotive. They discuss on the themes"
• "They are inspired" → "They were inspired"
• "was received with mixed reviews" → "was met with mixed reviews"
• "critics who argued over its quality" → "critics, who argued over the track's quality"
• "was released onto Hanna's" → "was uploaded to Hanna's"
• "October 18, 2017, featuring her" → "October 18, 2017. The visual features her"
• Remove ref 1 from the lead as that is described in the body
• Record chart should be targeted instead of record charts
• "number 47 in Scotland" → "number 47 on the Scottish Singles Chart"
• "among others." → "among others in 2017." as you should list the year it charted in
• "the singer performed "Out Loud" live" → "the singer performed it live"

This should remain as readers may be confused by what is meant with the "it" since the preceding few lines delve on the charts.

Background and composition

• "It was written by" → "The song was written by"
• "YouTube channel in which" → "YouTube channel, during which"
• "In a Billboard" → "In an interview with Billboard"
• "and are inspired by" → "and were inspired by"
• Not sure if the "one-off promotion" info belongs in the comp para, maybe the background para or promotion section?

I think is works here since the book is mentioned for the first time here because of the lyrics inspiration.

Reception

• "was received with mixed reviews" → "was met with mixed reviews"
• "likened it" → "likened the song"

I literally say "song" the line before. This works in my opinion.

• "well, that's kind of the point."[1]" → "well, that's kind of the point".[1]"
• "It further peaked at number 47 in Scotland" → "It further peaked at number 47 on the Scottish Singles Chart"
• "appeared on download charts in the United Kingdom and Canada" → "appeared at numbers 90 and 39 on download charts in the United Kingdom and Canada"
• "as well as on the Hitseekers chart" → "as well as at number six on the Hitseekers chart"

Promotion

• Put the music video info first and retitle Music video and promotion
• "was uploaded onto" → "was uploaded to"
• "that of Maya Rudolph" → "that of American actress Maya Rudolph"
• "as the video cuts" → "as the visual cuts" the video uses are too close to each other
• "in which she" → "in which the singer"

Track listing

• Good

Charts

• Good

Release history

• Territory → Country
• Add a ref column
• WikiLink Independent

References

• Archive all of these

The tool still doesn't work (at least for me).

• Cite multiple iTunes stores for ref 2 to verify it was various
• WikiLink ref 14 to Australian Recording Industry Association

Final thoughts and verdict

 On hold for now, fix the issues within a week. Kyle Peake (talk) 10:40, 5 July 2019 (UTC)

@Kyle Peake: Hi and thank you very much for your review. I've solved all your comments apart from where noted. Greetings; Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:43, 6 July 2019 (UTC)

Looks good, will gladly ✓ Pass this! --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:47, 6 July 2019 (UTC)