Talk:Portland Airport station/GA1
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Reviewer: SounderBruce (talk · contribs) 07:42, 12 January 2019 (UTC)
I promise that this review won't drag into the next year. Should be a short one given how familiar I am with the format. SounderBruce 07:42, 12 January 2019 (UTC)
- Lead
- Will you update the passenger count to something annual-based? It's more reliable for comparisons.
- Best I could do was average the Spring and Fall data (Thanks, TriMet). --Truflip99 (talk) 09:26, 12 January 2019 (UTC)
- Since the data wouldn't be complete (and combining would be WP:SYNTHESIS), the Fall boardings should be fine. SounderBruce 00:36, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
- Best I could do was average the Spring and Fall data (Thanks, TriMet). --Truflip99 (talk) 09:26, 12 January 2019 (UTC)
- Comma needed after United States
- I'd actually like to see the airport mentioned separately from the Red Line's terminals in the opening sentence.
- Mention Red Line before Airport MAX; I don't think we should be counting stations based on the project in place of the service
- "section nearest" would sound better as "section approaching"
- Insert a comma between "MAX project" and "which"
- "Just south" would be confusing here, so saying "near" is just fine
- Opening day sentence fragment could be expanded with some detail from the history section; I suggest mentioning when construction began
- "Fulfills" should be "Offers"
- History
- Any mention of earlier airport transit service (or when Route 12 commenced)?
- Any mention of previous services are vague, and there are no attainable records (that I know of) of an airport service start date possibly owing to the drastic jurisdiction changes that took place around that time. Hence my use of "since before". I will keep looking. @SJ Morg: could you possibly assist? You've been around longer :) --Truflip99 (talk) 21:32, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
- I provided that information in the article about the airport itself, under "Public transportation" (section is currently named "Ground transportation", however), in 2015. SJ Morg (talk) 04:19, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
- Any mention of previous services are vague, and there are no attainable records (that I know of) of an airport service start date possibly owing to the drastic jurisdiction changes that took place around that time. Hence my use of "since before". I will keep looking. @SJ Morg: could you possibly assist? You've been around longer :) --Truflip99 (talk) 21:32, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
- Break up the triple reference at 2/3/4
- "Early plans" from when?
- "newly-built" from when?
- "address expected passenger growth" or something similar
- "$300-million" does not need a hyphen
- I believe it does, as it is an adjective in this case. --Truflip99 (talk) 21:32, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
- I'm of the opinion that it doesn't, per this example. SounderBruce 02:23, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
- Done, but here's a university source that states otherwise, not to mention you passed the Red Line article which contains some, which means this will be an endless argument. Hopefully we can get this added to MOS, since the Blue and Red Line articles were put to a different standard, which I now have to revert. --Truflip99 (talk) 05:19, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
- I'm of the opinion that it doesn't, per this example. SounderBruce 02:23, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
- I believe it does, as it is an adjective in this case. --Truflip99 (talk) 21:32, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
- "since 1990" should be replaced with "within four years" to prevent closely-spaced years
- "protested the funding" should specify that the airlines opposed the ticket fee
- "crews of Stacy and Witbeck" should be "Stacy and Witbeck crews"
- The first sentence of the third paragraph could be expanded to mention the Red Line service pattern at the time
- "airport was closed" could be "airport itself was closed"
- I doubt that 3,800 riders used the station in the entire month of November; shouldn't it be a weekday average for that month?
SounderBruce 00:48, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
- Station details
- Mention the platform before the single-track (which is beyond the station anyway)
- Link to ticket vending machine and passenger information system
- "notifying travelers of train departure times" could be condensed and neutralized as "with train departure times"
- Art
- I'd rewrite the first sentence fragment as follows:
Pieces of public artwork for the Airport MAX project had a common theme of "flight".
- This statement is also not supported by the linked page in the reference section.
- "funded at a percentage" → "funded by a percentage" (it would also be nice to have an exact figure)
- The description for Time Flies is rather closely paraphrased from the TriMet website.
- That is why I put it in quotes, per WP:MOSQUOTE
- No mention of the bronze rails embedded into the concrete?
- Services
- Comma needed after "Red Line"
- Try to cut down on duplicate links to Portland International Airport
- Should "Central" Beaverton warrant capitalization?
- Again, only use Fall ridership to prevent synthesis, and mention the period of time alongside the season to prevent ambiguity.
- " the last of three trains..." this section flows rather awkwardly, and I would rewrite it as so:
while the final three trips travel eastbound to Ruby Junction... as through services to the Blue Line, the last of which departs at 1:41 am.
- Mention the 15-minute headways before 30 minutes
- Combine the following sentence fragment about days into the frequency sentence
- "The station is approximately..." would sound better as "Trains from the station take approximately 40 minutes to reach Pioneer Square..."
- "operates the 272-PDX Night Bus"; "in order to supplement hours" could be condensed into "during hours"; and "thus providing" could be "to provide 24-hour service".
- "every hour" should be "once an hour" given the limited timespan
- Is there any significance to the Washington & 80th intersection? Any transfers towards downtown?
- References
- What are the p.1+ for the Business Journal referring to?
- 19: Unlink The Oregonian
- 23: Missing accessdate
- 25: Greater Greater Washington is a blog and can't be used as a reliable source
- 27: "Airport" should not be used in the work parameter
That should be it. Putting this on hold while you work on resolving these issues. SounderBruce 04:51, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
- @SounderBruce: Addressed all, thanks! --Truflip99 (talk) 21:33, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.