Talk:There Is a Hell Believe Me I've Seen It. There Is a Heaven Let's Keep It a Secret./GA3

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 19:06, 21 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Quite a lot of problematic/dead links
Don't need to put the country next to the label in the Info box
Artwork needs an alt caption
Link studio album in the lead
through Visible Noise. → by
This album was → Never use 'this' use 'the'
with additional work → What kind of 'work'?
the album expands on the band's previous material, → How does it expand on something? It's a vague term
clean vocals, → What do you mean by this?
charting on a few UK singles charts. → Poor phrasing
Generally, I think the lead vague and confusing. It's needs to be more focused.
The lead mentions Gothenburg but Background and recording doesn't, just Sweden
pondered changing their approach to songwriting. → Which was?
for ten days straight, → Informal
just before embarking on the → just before they embarked on the
Give the date of the tour
but her one contribution was not included. → So they wanted her, then the next part of the sentence says that it wasn't included? There's no in between stage?
gang vocals. → What does this mean?
However, this album is seen as developing → Doesn't read very encyclopaedic
In their review, → of what?
The opening track of the album is "Crucify Me", which is complemented by guest vocals by → The opening track "Crucify Me" features vocals by
The second paragraph here is literally a list of short facts. There's no connection of flow between the sentences.
Lyrically, There Is a Hell is a story of a man battling his self-perpetuated inner turmoil.[13] There Is a Hell has been described as almost conceptual for Sykes, and the album's announcement from Epitaph stated that it "vividly explores humanity's collective good nature".[19] The band has looked at the lyrical themes of There Is a Hell as repercussions → Repetition of the album's title in quick succession
Oliver Sykes said → Only use surname
References wise:
- You use a combination of date formatting throughout the references; you should only use one British format and stick to iy
- Foreign language sources need a language parameter with the language written down
- Titles shouldn't have block capital words

I can't pass this article. This is its third GAN but the article still isn't well written. It needs to be thoroughly edited, I suggest a Peer Review or GOCE. It doesn't reflect the standard required.

(←) Reviewers please note I'm starting a requested GOCE copy-edit on this article; the text may change considerably and comments above may become redundant. Cheers, Baffle gab1978 (talk) 04:07, 9 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Copy-edit is now

Done; the review can proceed. Cheers, Baffle gab1978 (talk) 04:38, 10 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]