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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk) 14:06, 18 June 2011 (UTC)
Preliminary stuff[edit]
- The image upon which File:Haliaeetus leucogaster distr.png is based would be useful. Template:Information wouldn't hurt.
- File:Haliaeetus leucogaster -Karwar, Karnataka, India-flying-8-4c.jpg- the license implies Snowmanradio is the copyright holder
- An empty external links section looks odd.
First read through[edit]
- "Sanford's Sea Eagle" preferable to "Sanford's Sea-eagle"
- "Wink and colleagues" Who?
- "White-bellied's placement beyond its relationship with Sanford's Sea Eagle are a little less clear" Rephrase?
- "molecular data indicate that it is one of four species of tropical sea eagles (the other two being the African Fish Eagle and the Madagascar Fish Eagle)" One of four... the other two...
- "to be basal" Link or explanation?
- Basal (phylogenetics) is a nice link actually. Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:03, 20 June 2011 (UTC)
- "and the dark or slate-grey back" The?
- "(females larger than males)" This has already been established
- "The male's call was higher-pitched and more rapid than that of the female." Why past tense?
- "often seen perched high in a tree, or soaring over waterways and adjacent land. They are often" Repetition
- "They are often encountered singly or in pairs." Does this mean "they are often encountered, and they are x or y", or "when they are encountered, they are often x or y"
- "They keep within 1 km (0.6 mi) of shores, as there are no thermals over water." Reference?
- "It is a skilled hunter, and will attack prey up to the size of a swan. They also feed on carrion such as dead sheep, birds and fish along the waterline, as well as raiding fishing nets and following cane harvesters." Reference?
- "macropods" Link?
- "the Eastern long-necked turtle" Decap?
- "A talon-grappling display has been recorded where the pair will fly high before one flips upside down and tries to grapple the other's talons with its own. If successful, the two then plunge earthwards cartwheeling before separating as they approach the ground" Wish we had a photo/video of that...
- The discussion of the nests could do with a smoothing- it's a little choppy.
- "Measuring 73 x 55 mm.[37]" Why the full stop?
- "semi-altricial" Jargon
- "One egg may be infertile, and the second chick sometimes dies in the nest." Or, rather than and?
- "Nestlings have been recorded fledging anywhere from 70 to 84 days old, and remaining around the parents' territory for a further five or six months or until the following breeding season." Ref?
- You finish a section with "Depite nesting near each other, the two species seldom interacted, as the Wedge-tailed Eagles hunted away from water and the White-bellied foraged along the lake shores." but mention negative intereaction twice in the next section
- Yeah, well, seldom =/= never. These two species are huge raptors, and by far the largest in oz, so I think it is pretty amazing that they nest near each other and feed quite differently. Still doesn't mean they don't squabble some times. Large remnant trees are a hoty contested commodity for breeding y lots of birds so that isn't surprising either. I have moved one bit up which flows well, could move the other as well but am in two minds Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:45, 23 June 2011 (UTC)
- "DDT"?
- "Despite this, the result," I don't follow
- "introduced Common carp" Decap?
- "Known as Manulab to the people of Nissan Island," Do the people have a name?
- "Mak Mak people" Worth a redlink?
- "a Dreaming site" What does this mean?
- --> Dreaming (spirituality) Casliber (talk · contribs) 09:13, 22 June 2011 (UTC)
- "A Malay name is burung hamba siput "slave of the shellfish", Malay tales told of the sea-eagle screaming at the turning of tides to warn the shellfish." Rephrase? Not fully clear what is meant
- I have rejigged that section to make it flow better, essentially it is a paragraph of SE Asian significance, with some emblematic use, followed by some local folk tales. I like these sections which address some angloeuropean folklore bias vs European Robins, Common Ravens etc. Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:32, 23 June 2011 (UTC)
- Repetition of also in the cultural significance section
I'm yet to check the references. Two final thoughts- firstly, an idea of how long individual birds live would be helpful. Secondly, perhaps unsurprisingly, the article does come across as focussing a little too much on Australia. I'm not sure how this could be remedied, but I thought it would be helpful to let you know. J Milburn (talk) 15:16, 18 June 2011 (UTC)
- Got lifespan - that ref looks a bit simple but is referred to elsewhere, and Marchant and Higgins (the bible) has nothing. Yes there is a lot of focus on Australia but there is precious little overseas material. Will try to look for some more but has been hard going. Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:11, 23 June 2011 (UTC)
References[edit]
- Has Amadan Baldwin's thesis been properly published? Can we definitely consider it reliable?
- Is Naturia.per.sg reliable?
- There is some inconsistency in date formatting
- Ref 39 is yet to be expanded
- Ref 43 is incomplete, and is a deadlink anyway
- "Cultural Survival.org website" I don't think this is needed, and it certainly doesn't need to be in italics
- "Lonely Planet" Could do with a link
- "Environment Australia website (Kakadu National Park)" Again, unwarranted italics
- "Birds Australia website" Same
- You've labelled some PDFs, but not others. I wouldn't bother at all.
Promoted[edit]
Ok, I've had a look through the GAC and a last look through the article, and I am comfortable that the article is now ready to be promoted to good article status. It's looking very nice- good work. J Milburn (talk) 22:45, 25 June 2011 (UTC)