Talk:William Ufford, 2nd Earl of Suffolk/GA1

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Reviewer: Renata (talk) 10:51, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Generally, the article seems ok. But I do have a couple rather minor nitpicks and clarification requests.

  1. Please use William, Suffolk, and Ufford consistently. Pick one name and stick to it.
  2. "On 4 November 1369, William's father died and William was invested with the earldom of Suffolk soon after." -> when did his brothers die? who were they?
  3. "William and Thomas Beauchamp were going overseas" -> change to "William de Ufford and Thomas Beauchamp" as it seems you are talking about two Beauchamp brothers.
  4. "he participated in the rather unsuccessful campaigns of 1370" -> where? which war?
  5. "shared some of the same retainers.[8][clarification needed]" -> resolve the tag
  6. "At the Good Parliament in 1367 Suffolk" -> I believe the date is incorrect
  7. "discuss the parliament's grievances concerning Gaunt" -> a couple of words what those grievances were
  8. Move info about his 2 marriages to earlier sections - it does not really belong to "death" section
  9. "Net worth c. £2–3,000 p.a." -> ref needed

Overall, good job. Renata (talk) 10:51, 7 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Pardon my tardiness, and thanks for your patience. This is what I've done to address your issues:
  1. This is actually consistent: I use William up until his succession in 1369 (to avoid confusion with his father) and Suffolk thereafter.
  2. I don't think much biographical information survives on his brothers, but I added the name of the oldest one.
  3. Done
  4. Expanded
  5. I added a short explanation, I hope this is enough.
  6. Silly mistake, good catch!
  7. Done
  8. Ok, I've moved the marriages up but maintained some information about the dispersal of the estates at the bottom, and renamed the section "Death and dispersal of estates".
  9. Done
Hope this helps, let me know if there is anything else. Lampman (talk) 03:12, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
All good. I like what you did to marriages. They explain about his life, don't they? Thanks! Renata (talk) 03:34, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! I actually did an extensive rewrite based on your suggestions, and I think it's a better article now. Lampman (talk) 10:30, 15 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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