Talk:2011 Veranda's Willems–Accent season/GA1
Appearance
GA Review[edit]
GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 05:09, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
I am not an expert on cycling, but am a sports fan. If I can make sense of the article it will probably serve the readers. I will attempt to review this soon.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:09, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
Is there a link to explain the phrase "proactively selected", which sounds like jargon?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:13, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
Please use the term professional or amateur before cycling in the first sentence.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:13, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
- 2011 roster
Some of this text needs to appear in text. I am not familiar with what is expected of this sport, but based on having done seasons for college football and college basketball, it seems that you need some text describing the teams position coming into the year. I.e., were they defending champions, a team on the rebound from a bad year, a team overcoming scandalous times, or whatnot. Mention why some roster moves were important. Were any of the newcomers expected to do particularly well? Had any posted notable performances the prior year. What about people who departed before the season. Who would be missed. Were any fan favorites, elite performers?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:03, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
- Spring classics
Although "placed no higher than 11th in any of these races." is a bit more informative, it seems more normal to say "placed outside of the top 10 in all of these races". Thoughts?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:13, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
- Fall races
"with Habeaux taking the spoils" sounds unencyclopedic.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:13, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
- Grand Tours
This section needs to be merged or expanded.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:19, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
-
- Not a proper solution. The LEAD summarizes the main text. Thus, if it is in the LEAD, it should be in the main text in at least as much detail.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:45, 28 March 2012 (UTC)
- Season victories
Is there any season standings or rankings to put in prose as a description of the season?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:19, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
- Postseason
Did the team lose any riders at the end of the season or in the offseason?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:19, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
- Other
I see a lot of sponsor ads on the uniform in the picture. Can you provide a sourced list of sponsors?
- I think the required changes are fairly modest. I will put this on hold for one week.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:23, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for responding to my concerns. I am going to Pass the article now.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:02, 29 March 2012 (UTC)