Talk:Camp Phoenix (Maine)
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[edit]Hi Charles,
This is a great article. I was able to learn so much about your beloved Camp Phoenix! You did a great job giving information around the background and timeline of events surrounding the Camp. I also liked how you mentioned the lake, which allows for fishing to occur, but are there any other activities that potentially occur that you could discuss as well? If nothing crosses your mind, you could also just mention somewhere how this is a family park that is quieter and oriented around spending time away from electronics. Also, while reading yours I realized I should use the blue linked words to lead to other wiki pages, so thanks! Nkojo899 (talk) 12:34, 25 July 2024 (UTC)
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[edit]I really like the visuals added to the article, it provides some context about the location that I maybe would not have gotten from only reading the article. I also really liked the timeline, I thought it was descriptive and helped me understand some of its history and how that affects its current identity, especially its privatization. If I were to suggest any changes, I would maybe talk more about the surroundings or just about environment overall, since I thought those topics were really interesting and wanted to hear more about it, but I can understand if that might be difficult to find sources for. I think the most important thing the author could do to improve their contribution would be to stay a bit more neutral, some phrases like "scenic camp" , "getaway", " seclusion", may show the author's personal thoughts on the camp that may not be universally shared. Branbran58 (talk) 13:11, 25 July 2024 (UTC)