Talk:Debut (Björk album)/GA1

GA Review

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:
The prose is a little clumsy in places, so I'd recommend a third-party to come and copy-edit it at some point. I've made a few notes below on bigger stuff I'd like to see fixed. If you can work on those points, I'd say the prose is good enough for GA.

B. MoS compliance:
I think you need to make a sweep of the article based on WP:LQ. Many of the sources are off-line, so I can't check them, but I have a feeling that alot of the quotation punctuations should be inside the quotes, rather than outside. In the few sources that I could/did check I found some problems with punctuation.

This still needs to be addressed.

Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Mostly fine, though the term "generally very positive" seems a little POV to me, specifically the "very", as that's your interpretation of the reviews. I'd highly recommend just going with "generally positive", as it basically means the same thing but avoids sounding the implied enthusiasm of a fan's assessment.

Fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
Fair-use images should be kept under 300X300 pixels, so the album cover needs to be shrunk.

Fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
I'd like to see more images, but that's usually a difficult task with albums, so I'll just leave that as a recommendation.
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Mostly a very good article. I've placed the article's nomination on hold, so if you can take care of the points I've made here, I'd be happy to promote. Please ping me on my talk page when you feel you're done and/or would like me to take another look. Drewcifer (talk) 20:09, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"The album went gold in Canada and platinum in the United States." Explain what "going gold" means. A little rewording and a link to Music recording sales certification will to the trick.

Re-phrased. Is that better? Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Better in the article, but still needs to be addressed in the lead.

"Björk and Hooper's recording ideas were very similar, which made decide to end production work with Massey and Fox." Reword the "made decide" part.

Re-phrased. I should learn to write at something over a 2nd grade level. Fixed! Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Hooper introduced Björk to studio technology, and studio programmer Marius De Vries" Don't need a comma there.

Removed useless comma! Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Hooper produced all the tracks from track one to track ten on the album" Howabout something like "produced the first ten tracks"?

Yeah that's much better. fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"and foreshadow the style her later albums would take." Although I can't check the source citing this statement, this is inherently an opinion comparing some of her work here and her later work, not necessarily fact as it is presented. Unless the source specifically says that, I'd recommend removing the statement completely.

Removed!Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"The New York Times described "Human Behaviour"'s" avoid the awkward 's after quotations.

Fixed quotation use.Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Debut was released on 5 July 1993 on on compact disc and cassette on One Little Indian in the United Kingdom and through Elektra Records in North America." Fix the "on on", but also, there's alot of "on"s as it is, so it reads a little awkwardly. Try and reword.

Re-worded, and removed the dreaded double-word-use. Is there an echo in here here?Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Debut has won awards, was placed on "best of" chart listings, and has been acclaimed by critics since its initial release." This is a very awkward sentence, and has pov issues as well.

Re-phrased slightly to make it make more sense. Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure what the "(I Can't Get No) Satisfaction" sentence is doing in the reception section. Drewcifer (talk) 20:09, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I was going to use that part in part of a section about the Tour for debut, but i'll save it for another day. removed for now. Andrzejbanas (talk) 21:34, 6 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Promoting Excellent work! I'm happy to promote the article to GA status. Keep up the good work, and while you're at it, please take a few minutes to help over at WP:GAN by reviewing an article or two. Drewcifer (talk) 01:49, 7 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]