Talk:Desperate Housewives season 3/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 21:36, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Will review this one soon. Ruby 2010/2013 21:36, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

Initial comment: there is one deadlink. Will complete further review soon. Ruby 2010/2013 21:38, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

You give undue weight to the clip show in the lead (it takes up 1/4 of it). Recommend you trim this, and add to the rest with other content from the article body. As I voiced in the season 2 GA review, you easily have enough to fill 3 or 4 paragraphs (plot, production, more from reception etc). You definitely need to mention that the plot advanced forward 6 months, for instance
Also, there is no mention of the clip shows in the article body. See WP:LEAD
The "disaster episode" seems out of place in the lead; suggest reorganizing
ABC linked twice in lead
"Buena Vista Home Entertainment released officially released the season on DVD in the United States and Canada on September 4, 2007." - released is seen twice
"Michael Edelstein and Tom Spezialy, who served as executive producers for seasons one and two, did not return for the series' third season due to creative differences.[3][4][5] They were replaced by Kevin Murphy and George W. Perkins, both of whom had previously served as co-executive producers in earlier seasons.[6]" I assume by this that co-executive producer is below an executive producer (i.e. they don't mean the same thing)?
Link to Orson Hodge and Kyle MacLachlan the first time you mention him in production section; same with the other actors. Then, make sure to unlink those actors in the following casting section
No references for two paragraphs in casting section? The "star billing" parts at least need citations
How have Edie's short-term relationships made her an iconic character? I don't understand this.
"Andrea Bowen acted as Julie Mayer, the responsible and caring daughter of Susan, whose close relationship to her mother have made her more mature" - Have made who more mature? Julie or Susan?
"...which started that illadvised business in the basement ..." - is "illadvised" a typo on your part, or the writer's?
No need link to Listen to the Rain on the Roof because you already have earlier. Also, I think this is the first time you mention the full premiere title. I had to click on it to understand what you were talking about.
As far as I can tell, the reception section only discusses the premiere! Considering the season was 23 episodes, this is a problem
"The season eceived critical acclaim"
Awards and nominations section is entirely unsourced and is too large for one paragraph - cite and break down into smaller ones. Also, WP:OVERLINK is a problem here
This link doesn't work. I was going to verify that it states there were "numerous fan complaints," as I doubted that was in the source given
Again, WP:OVERLINK is a problem in ratings section - be careful
Home video release - first paragraph missing citations
Reference 1 is improperly formatted

My first instinct was to fail the article, but I will place it on hold for seven days if you feel you can get it improved by then. I can tell you are passionate about this subject, and we can always use more of that on Wikipedia! Please leave notes here upon completing each suggestion. Thank you. Ruby 2010/2013 17:57, 28 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It has been eight days, and the nominator (who has been actively editing elsewhere during this period) has not made any response. I am thus failing the article. Ruby 2010/2013 16:31, 6 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]