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I am nominating this article for a reassessment because I feel there are still some issues with the article. The prose is not clear, references are not correctly formatted and others. I reviewed the article in the first place, but now feel it needs reassessment. Thank you. Novice7 | Talk 06:40, 2 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The second sentence is not clear and is confusing. Many instances of poor language "Although only officially released in the US, the song appeared on the charts in Australia". DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 16:14, 2 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The second paragraph of Background and release contains a lot of confusing sentences squeezed together. What I found:
There are many similarities between Knowles' "Diva" and the song "A Milli" by Lil Wayne, mainly because both tracks are produced by Bangladesh.How can i fix that?
In an interview with MySpace, Knowles was asked whether she agreed that "Diva" is a woman's equivalent to "A Milli". She replied "It is, in a way....it wasn't consciously."[14] Consequently, the song became to be known as the feminine companion to Lil Wayne's A MilliHow can i fix that?
Just correct the "She replied" part. Maybe merge it with the previous sentence?? Novice7 | Talk
December 2008 that American R&B singer -> overlinked DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
US single from I Am... Sasha Fierce (2008), -> the album was mentioned before, so move the date above. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
on the same date.[6] On the same date -> or merge it or search synonyms DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Composition
a R&B song -> overlinked DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
by Bangladesh -> overlinked DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Sasha", Knowles' alter ego -> Sasha", Knowles' alter ego, DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
M Noting its similarity to "A Milli", Andy Kellman Allmusic chose "Diva" as the standout track from the album, -> re-worte it. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
to "Freakum Dress" and "Ring the Alarm" -> overlinked DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The Observer -> Overlinked DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
is beloved]." -> and the [? DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Chart performance and live performance DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Chart performance and live performance -> Chart and live performance[s] DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I Am... Tour -> uneeded italics. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Music video
on November 22, 2008[45] -> on November 22, 2008,[45] DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The first three sentences of Background seem sloppy and poor to me. Example: Meanwhile, he showed it to American R&B singer Keyshia Cole, who liked the beat of the song, however did not like everything on the record. Later, Cole said she was going to sing the song, however, this time Knowles also wanted the track. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Why is there a vertical bar after December 2008 that? DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Again, ho was at that particular time working on her third studio album, Fantasy Ride, had remixed "Diva". The remix was supposed to be featured on her Fantasy Ride Mixtape - bad. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Rewrite second para first sentence. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
However, its release was scrapped, and on January 20, 2009, "Diva" was released instead to urban radio[5] while "Halo" was sent for mainstream airplay on the same date.[6] On the same date, "Diva" was sent to rhythmic radio alone. – confusing.
Why mention so much about Ego and Halo? Yes, it is needed because it shows the integral concept of the album, that is releasing one Single from "I Am..." and the other form "Sasha".
-Composition-
an R&B song, not a R&B song. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
maybe link stuttering to Wikitionary? No need to link words
Again, In an interview with MySpace, Knowles was asked whether she agreed that "Diva" is a woman's equivalent to "A Milli". She replied "It is, in a way....it wasn't consciously." – please rewrite. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Sasha", Knowles' alter ego can even be heard saluting her earning power in the song. – needs fix. I don't like the "can even be heard" part. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
-Critical reception-
Link flagrant to Wikitionary? No need as mentioned before
The EW review with drums and specification repeats (Composition & Critical). Remove it. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
picked out "Diva" as "a" standout. Two other tracks are also selected. DoneJivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not sure about NFCC, you might want to ask someone of the screenshot. Can you please explain?
Well, according to WP:NFCC policies (especially 8), it is to be used only if the reader get significant knowledge from it. Novice7 | Talk 06:19, 6 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
But the pictures shows her Sasha Fierce glasses. Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:18, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]