Talk:Hisar (city)/GA2

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: TheSpecialUser (talk · contribs) 17:01, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be

Doing... this again. Usually GA noms are made 3-4 months after 1 failed nom, but I see that a good amount of work is done, so lets see what has been done. →TSU ^tp* 17:01, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

I m Working to give out all the problems in details, but it'll take some time. Thanks. →TSU ^tp* 06:22, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Minor fixes

Lets start it now. Firstly, I'll point out minor issues and then go for bigger problems and at the end, give out the final result. →TSU ^tp* 12:07, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Fix Dablinks Done
Fix Dead URLs Done There is one link(Nehru Library) it shows as dead but that is working fine.
Add WP:ALT to all images please. Done

→TSU ^tp* 12:11, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Refs needed

It was established in the year 1971. Rare species of endangered animals such as Blackbuck, Chital, Sambar and Nilgai can be found here. Done
The church has been declared as a historical monument by Indian National Trust for Art and Cultural Heritage. Done
It has completely been converted into a mound. A long pillared structure with a flat roof is situated on the top of the mound and is known as Baradari. Barsi Gate served as entrance to the fort and is now located in the town market. It was built in 1304-1305. Done
The city was also a major centre during the Mauryan period as Buddhist and Jain temples have also been revealed in the excavations. Done
The important social groups in the district are Jats, Bishnois, Brahmins, Sainis, Banias, Gujjars, Ahirs, Rajputs, Kumhars, Aroras, Chamars and Balmikis. Jat is the largest social group in the city. They are of two types, Deswalis and Bagris. Bishnois have migrated from Rajasthan. There are two sections of Brahmins in the district, i.e., Gaur and Khandelwal. Most of the Aroras are migrant from Pakistan after the partition of the country in 1947. Banias are divided into Aggarwals, Oswals and Maheshwaris. The Aggarwals are said to be the descendants of the inhabitants of Agroha. They hold Agroha in great reverence. Oswals and Maheshwaris trace their origin to the Rajputs of Rajasthan. Done

General issues

The sub-section of "culture", "Media and Television", should be made out to a separate section "Media" Done
"See also" must not have more then 2 links: Hisar (Lok Sabha constituency), and Hisar division Done
The section, "Places of interest" should be merged to "culture" section Done
"Historical Places" should be renamed to "Architecture" Done

→TSU ^tp* 19:58, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Last issues (neutrality, word choices, grammar and few fixes)

Average literacy rate is 81.04 %.[1] In 1960s, the per capita income of the city was the highest in the country. - this is in the lead. It should not be in fact, because it sounds little odd and it it "too specific". Lead should summarize the article not introduce new things. So please move those lines to demographics section. Done
Merge this: The most commonly spoken languages are Hindi[14] and English; the most common dialects are Haryanvi[15] and Bagri. to the second paragraph in the lead. Done
Boldness in "Etymology" - Please make sure that words do not appear bold as it is useless and also looks awkward. Done
In religions and communities, change this word "bulk" as it is little bit informal. Done
Remove this from culture as it has been used previously: Hindus constitute the bulk of population representing roughly 97% of the population followed by Muslims, Sikhs, Jains and Christians. Done
This doesn't make sense and sounds odd, please rewrite it: It is now governed by Municipal Corporation, Hisar which comes under Hisar Urban Agglomeration. Done
Hisar is India's largest galvanized iron manufacturing city, this should be As of June 2012, Hisar is India's largest galvanized iron manufacturing city Done
in the economy section this is repeating as it is used twice previously so remove this: Due to presence of a large steel industry, Hisar is also known as "The City of Steel". Now to fix this change the second sentence and make it: As of June 2012, Hisra, "The City of Steel" is India's largest galvanized iron manufacturing city, Done
Last but big fix; create a new section from this sub section: "Transport facilities" like Ahmedabad has. Done

Once addressed this, I'll have a look at the article again and will point out issues if I found but most probably this is now an eligible GA with the issues fixed. Cheers! →TSU ^tp* 04:54, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Doing... Converted transport into a separate section. But it would take atleast one day to find and add more data to all the subsections of transport. Most probably will complete it by tomorrow evening. Regards, Vishal14K | Talk 12:30, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: Awesome! Just 1 more thing is that remove refs from the lead. Now a days, GA and FA don't have refs in the lead because the topic is covered later in the article. So also make sure that things in the lead are covered in the article and thus move the refs from lead to the place where the info is in the article. Cheers! →TSU ^tp* 14:40, 30 June 2012 (UTC) Done[reply]

Phew! I think everything is complete now. Please take a look again and let me know if there is anything left. Regards, Vishal14K | Talk 18:55, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

- I know that it would have been tough and boring lately but they were to be done for GA. I m sorry. I have to tell: I haven't seen an dedicated editor like you! Congrats! →TSU ^tp* 19:46, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]