Talk:III Armored Corps/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 21:32, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Overall the article is good, though I found a couple issues:

"On July 18, the attack jumped off, with the force spearheading the French Tenth Army's assault the high ground south of Soissons and cut vital rail lines." Confusing at the beginning (jumped off), reword. Also, should be 'cutting vital..' I think.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 15:49, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"III Corps took the Army's east flank, would protect the flank as the Army advanced to Montfaucon, then Cunel and Romagne." Feels like a word or part of the sentence is missing.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 15:49, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
You seem to interchange inactivated and deactivated. I would stick with one (ideally the latter).
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 15:49, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Is the Fort Hood shooting relevant enough to the corps that it could be added in? I'll leave that up to you, I'm not certain either way.
- I would say so; the victims of the shooting, which gained a significant amount of publicity, were all under III Corps command. —Ed!^(talk) 15:49, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - In that case I'd like to see a couple sentences added to the article on it. After that's done I'll pass it. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:13, 4 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll put this on hold and pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 21:32, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I have responded to your points, thank you for reviewing the article. —Ed!^(talk) 15:49, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, so the article passes GA status. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:18, 6 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]