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Reviewer: PizzaKing13 (talk · contribs) 04:34, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
I'll take a look at reviewing this article. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 04:34, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
Images
[edit]- Both images have proper licenses.
MoS, structure, coverage, and grammar
[edit]- Lead
- Add "the" before "Mongol conquest of the Khwarazmian Empire"
- "On the Irghiz River, Aktobe Region, Kazakhstan" → "On the Irghiz River (modern day Aktobe Region, Kazakhstan)" as it makes reference to a modern place
- Remove "Modern historians estimate" from both strength parameters in the infobox
- I moved the article's three campaignboxes into the infobox
- "in 1209 or 1219" → "1209 or 1219"
- Use an en dash at "1220-21"
Done all done.
- Chronology
- "The battle is described, in varying levels of detail, by four separate chroniclers" → "The battle is described in varying levels of detail by four separate chroniclers" unnecessary commas
- Use an en dash at "1215-6"
- "highly suspect" WP:COLLOQUIAL(?)
- "One historian, citing the fact" which historian?
- "It is certain that" according to who?
- "One theory suggests" who's theory?
Done all done
- Battle
- "assembled a force of his own, and rode to meet them" → "assembled a force of his own and rode to meet them" unnecessary comma
- Done
- "at least one modern historian" which modern historian?
- Done
- Who is De Hartog? Include his first name
- Done
- Who is Sverdrup? same as above
- Done
- "it is often cited" by who?
- Everyone, and I do mean everyone. I've attributed it to Barthold
- I see, alright.
- What's the relevance of the quote?
- To illustrate the Shah's reaction. It's not necessary, should I remove it?
- I personally don't see it's connection to the events, and it isn't necessary for the article so it should be removed.
Done
Overall
[edit]- Coverage seems to be sufficient for what is known about the battle. It is interesting to me that we don't even know for certain what year it occurred in.
- No war edits ongoing on the page.
- Categories are good.
- Article is well referenced.
- Sources are reliable.
- I saw that Category:1209 in Asia did not exist, so I created it and added it to the page.
- Well written, no misspellings which I saw.
- Article follows a neutral point of view.
Well done. This article is close to good article status, just a few edits and it should be able to pass this review. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 05:17, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
- @PizzaKing13: have responded, thanks very much. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 09:45, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
- @AirshipJungleman29: Looks about done, just the issue about the quote and I'll pass it. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 17:37, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
- @PizzaKing13:, all
Done. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 17:47, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
- @AirshipJungleman29: Very well done on this article, very interesting battle. I'll give is a pass to good article status. PizzaKing13 (Hablame) 20:18, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
- @PizzaKing13:, all
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.