Talk:Park Hall (Oswestry)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:38, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll finish this soon JAGUAR 20:38, 5 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments[edit]

I think that the second paragraph of the lead could be expanded a little to summarise the article per WP:LEAD. Maybe mention a sentence or two on its international football hosts?
"In 2003, Oswestry Town and Total Network Solutions voted to merge" - the first mention of Total Network Solutions should have its initials in brackets (Total Network Solutions (TNS)) as "TNS" is mentioned later on in the section without any explenation
"During renovation, The pitch was replaced with an artificial" - no capitalisation
"an artificial Ligaturf pitch based on the same that was used by Red Bull Salzburg" - Red Bull Salzburg is a dab link
"Park Hall has also been used by England schoolboys football team as their home ground for a match in 2016 against the Republic of Ireland" - since it seems recent, can a month be added here?
"The New Saints were awarded a £445,000 grant from the Football Foundation" - link Football Foundation
The external link is dead

Sorry for the delay in reviewing this, I usually review GANs in the same day but real life has held me back. This is a compact and well written article, so the review was quite short. The references are in good order and I could find little prose issues. Once all of the above are clarified then this should be good to go! JAGUAR 17:14, 7 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: I have made the changes you suggested. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 21:58, 7 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, this looks good to go now.

JAGUAR 11:15, 8 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]