Talk:The Marble Index/GA1
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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 22:51, 12 August 2016 (UTC)
- Infobox and lead
- Add alternate text.
- Fixed. I'm sorry I'm finding out just now you started reviewing!
- Try replacing the cover art with a .png version as is the norm.
- Fixed
- So no actual release date?
- Couldn't find one
- and John Cale's musical arrangements --> and producer John Cale's musical arrangements
- Fixed
- thus also drastically changing the looks that had initially made her a famous fashion model. --> thus also drastically changing the looks that had initially made her famous as a fashion model. --> also link model.
- Fixed
- Nico's unprecedented sound and personal style are considered an influence on several artists --> This needs a little bit detail for the lead, as to how the sound was unprecendented and what was her personal style.
- Fixed. Is it still too vague? --Bleff (talk) 22:44, 30 September 2016 (UTC)
- Hi, IndianBio. I hope not to be annoying. How is the review going?--Bleff (talk) 12:57, 18 October 2016 (UTC)
- Background
- However, the Velvet Underground was unimpressed with Nico's ability and reluctant to include her --> However, the Velvet Underground was unimpressed with Nico's ability and were reluctant to include her
- Fixed
- I really love this whole section but I think the recording part can be made into a separate section. There is ample amount of material for the background info and the recording. And I really like how it flows chronologically.
- Fixed, although I was unsure about where to make the division.
- He gave her a budget of $10,000 --> Lets use the inflation template about how the payment would have changed in current bottom dollar.
- Fixed
- Cale later said that during the recording of her solo albums, "she was really in pain --> We can simplify it as "During the sessions, Nico and Cale "fought at every oportunity" with the singer "being in pain" while recording the album.
- Fixed
- Composition
- The quote box, can you mention what Nico is exactly talking about?
- I wrote "Nico discussing her distinctive songwriting during this period"
- Again I think the composition section is actually more describing the themes and influences of the songs, and then the songs section talks about the main composition
- I thought of the Composition section giving an overview of the album's sonority, its influences and lyricism. While the songs' section going specifically track by track. I removed the subdivision, though. Is it better like this?
- Critical reception
- WE list the reviews which has an exact score attached to it in the template. Please remove Lester and Trouser Press from it as thats interpretation of the review.
- Fixed
- I really am amazed at this section and have taken pointers regarding my editing of critical response sections.
- I am very humbled. Thank you!
I have given the album a thorough read and I find it to be quite flawless. After you address them, I will do a source and spotchecks review. —IB [ Poke ] 12:58, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
- Ok IndianBio, I believe I adressed all the flaws you pointed out up to now. Thank you very much for the positive feedback! Bleff (talk) 20:03, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
- Media usage
- File:The Marble Index by Nico.png --> Has proper succinct rationale.
- File:Warhol's Exploding Plastic Inevitable with Nico.png --> Free licensed
- File:Frozen Warnings (Nico).ogg --> succinct rationale for sample per WP:SAMPLE
- File:Nico at Lampeter University - November 1985 (1).jpg --> Licensed flickr upload
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Just the last thing as detailed above and then we are good to go. —IB [ Poke ] 09:37, 7 November 2016 (UTC)