Talk:White-eared titi monkey/GA1
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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 14:32, 31 December 2012 (UTC)
- I propose to take on this review and will make some detailed comments within the next couple of days. At first inspection it looks well written and comprehensively referenced though I notice that the first paragraph of the Taxonomy section has no citation. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 14:32, 31 December 2012 (UTC)
First reading[edit]
- I will consider later whether the lead provides a good summary of the rest of the article.
- "Its southern range includes forests ..." - "The southern end of its range" would be preferable
- "The species has a home range of 0.005 to 0.14 square kilometres (0.0019 to 0.054 sq mi) and has a complex vocal repertoire to maintain their territory." - This sentence is part singular and part plural. Also, "species" should be replaced by some more suitable term such as "family group"
- Link "predated", "pelage",
- The first paragraph of the Taxonomy section needs a reference
- "Anatomy and physiology" - This seems a strange heading for the section
- The last paragraph of "Anatomy and physiology" probably belongs in another section (depending on what you rename this one)
- "The white-eared titi is arboreal, spending most of its time in the lower levels of the forest. It often leaps small distances between trees due to the discontinuous nature of the lower levels; these leaps are not more than several body lengths. The titi monkey is also known to enter the main canopy and may travel along the ground, though the later is rare." - "later" not "later", but these sentences could be better expressed.
- "During normal movement through its environment it walks, clambers and leaps, it also bounds and climbs." - Another awkward sentence
- "When confronted with a intruders they will respond with combative behaviour together, with males showing increased agitation to other males." - This sentence needs attention
- "and lives in groups of 2 to 7 individuals " - These numbers could be expressed as words
- "A large proportion of the diet is leaves, preferring young leaves and leaf buds that are high in protein, ..." - This is ungrammatical
- The ecology section has a number of references to "Titi monkeys". Do they refer to this species or to the genus?
- "It is found in areas with dense vegetation, often choosing the inhabit in the thickest parts of the forest." - This sentence needs attention
- There is a lack of consistency in the formatting of dates of retrieval for the references. In other ways, the referencing looks good.
- There is close paraphrasing with some copy/paste in the use of information from the Primate Info Net source. This is rather serious.
- The particular sentences I noticed as being close paraphrased were in the Behaviour section. You can see what Duplicate Detector brings up when set at 4 words and 20 characters. One other page of the Primate info net factsheet gives some duplication also. One offending part sentence is "foot grasp, lip-smack, nuzzle, gently grasp one another and sit pressed together" See what you can do to improve these sentences. I see they first appeared on June 1st 2010. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:32, 7 January 2013 (UTC)
- That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:35, 1 January 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for the review, I'll get on to it as soon as I can, should have some time at the beginning of next week. Cheers, Jack (talk) 00:05, 6 January 2013 (UTC)
- I've hopefully addressed all your concerns. Let me know about the paraphrasing issue. Thanks again for the review, Jack (talk) 17:22, 7 January 2013 (UTC)
Rate | Attribute | Review Comment |
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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | Concerns I had about close paraphrasing have been resolved. | |
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. |
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2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | References are well laid out. | |
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | Article is very well referenced | |
2c. it contains no original research. | Not as far as I can see. | |
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | ||
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | This criterion is met. | |
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | Article is neutral | |
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | Article is stable. | |
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | Images are appropriately licensed. | |
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | Images are relevant and several are by the nominator. | |
7. Overall assessment. | Article now meets GA criteria Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:32, 10 January 2013 (UTC) |