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I firmly believe that this article is almost ready for a featured article candidacy. All I need is objective criticism on how to ensure that it passes. There are a couple of events that need sourcing and more beef, but 80% of the work is done. Thank you! Monsieurdl mon talk-mon contribs 21:45, 4 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The Land

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Good work so far - there's a lot of very detailed material in it. I think the material is there to make it A-class or FA, but a bit of editing and referencing is needed first. A few comments as I read through:

  • In the infobox, you distinguish French active and reserve strength, but not Prussian.
I fixed that- Howard mentions the "reserves and the Landwehr", and there is no other reference that differentiates the strength by reserves alone. Also, no captured totals for the Prussian Army is listed in any reference I have searched. Monsieurdl mon talk-mon contribs 16:17, 7 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • There is a definite shortage of references in the summary-style passages ('Prussian Army Advance' onwards). Even if something is referenced in another article, it must be re-referenced here.
  • Is there more that can be said about the impact/results of the war? This section seems a bit on the short side. (This section is also unreferenced)
  • It is a big topic and will inevitably be quite a long article. Could the 'Causes of the War' section be split off into another article and summarised? At the moment, it's quite a long section and only marginally relevant to the war.
I have created another article called Causes of the Franco-Prussian War, and I am working towards a summary for events based upon the material removed. Great idea! It was a bit too long. Monsieurdl mon talk-mon contribs 20:33, 6 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • A difficulty with all big history articles is to find a way to make the article coherent. At the moment, I think this is lacking. The way I would approach this is to identify the key themes about the War (which also demonstrate why it's important and interesting) and where possible to refer to these themes.

Keep up the good work and thanks for taking on this war! The Land (talk) 22:08, 4 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]