Will add comments later today. Cheers, TBrandley 14:05, 18 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Where is the production code referenced?
- Nixed. GRAPPLE X 04:34, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Where is the running time referenced?
- To the episode, really; same as things like plot summaries etc. GRAPPLE X 04:34, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- # should be No., per WP:POUND
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 04:34, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Where are guest stars referenced?
- Episode again, could probably add a book source though. GRAPPLE X 04:34, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Instead of a note, perhaps say "also known as "Genderbender", that is what I did for Awake article "Game Day", which is in one of my sandboxes
- I don't know; with the likes of the Twin Peaks episodes the alternate titles are markedly different so I put them up front; this and "Game Day"/"Gameday" are just parsing variations so I'm not sure it's important enough to include in the lead, which is why it's shuffled off to a minor aside. GRAPPLE X 04:34, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Only link Fox, without network linked in both lede and reception
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 04:34, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Some sentences in lede are short, like premiere date note, is merging possible?
- Merged a little. GRAPPLE X 04:34, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "unconnected to the series' wider mythology" perhaps say "a stand-alone plot which is unconnected to the overarching mythology of The X-Files"
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Link the producers' name, first in lede, second in production
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "was written due to" that full sentences makes me think that they wrote the episode because of him, perhaps the writing of the episode was inspired by ...
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "an episode with more of a sexy edge" I don't think quotes fit in the lede, perhaps paraphrase maybe
- I'm not sure a paraphrasing of that would work; definitely the "sexy edge" bit should be attributed as a quote since it's a bit POV and informal and I'm not sure how to paraphrase it formally and neutrally. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "Langley, British Columbia" should be two separate links
- Fair enough. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "dance-club" hyphen not needed
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "shy" violates WP:NPOV and WP:OR
- I'm not sure it does, but I've removed it anyway. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "The agents return to the village which is now deserted. The underground tunnels are blocked entirely with the white clay. Mulder and Scully walk into the nearby field where they find a large crop circle, suggesting that the Kindred are aliens" very short paragraph please merge
- Fair enough. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- wanted an episode with more of a sexy edge is missing ending quotation mark in production section
- The whole quote begins at "wanted" and ends at "another planet", where it does have a terminal quote mark. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Unlink United Kingdom per WP:OVERLINK
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "with a 12 share" add comma after
- Split as a new sentence to avoid too many commas. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Is there any opening for critics and their general stuff, like "This episode received generally ..."
- Sure. Added a little bit to that paragraph too. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "The episode faced criticism over its ending using a deus ex machina to indicate that the Kindred may have been aliens." there seems to be "criticism" from the show's people, not actual critics
- Yeah, but those offering the criticism are properly attributed and not implied to be television reviewers; they're also not directly involved with this episode specifically. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Link James Wong in first mention
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "Glen Morgan said that the episode" refer Glen Morgan as Morgan after first mention per WP:MOS
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "B-" add actual quotes around it in article
- Got it, also changed to a real minus. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- "was rated a B-" how about "was given a "B-""
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Add quotes around A in reception
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Ref. 2: WP:DASH problems
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Ref. 2: Allrovi → AllRovi
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Ref. 12: Shouldn't use {{cite episode}}; it is a movie, not episode
- There's no "cite movie" substitute, though; kludging cite episode to fit still presents all the information properly. GRAPPLE X
- Ref. 23: Remove "EW.com" part from title, not needed as publisher is right by it
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Ref. 24: Use single quotes (') rather than double quotes ("), per WP:MOS
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Ref. 25: WP:DASH problems
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Remove Wikia external link per WP:ELNO
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Categories should be sorted in alphabetical order
- Got it. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
TBrandley 01:56, 19 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I've made a start on these but it's pretty late and I've an early morning; I'll be back Friday to continue with them. Thanks very much for taking the time to review it though. GRAPPLE X 04:34, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Took me a while but I finally got round to everything. Thanks for the review. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 25 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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