Talk:2016 Paris ePrix/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Kpgjhpjm (talk · contribs) 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
Let us start this GA review . Kpgjhpjm 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
Lead[edit]
- Please change in the Les Invalides building complex before a crowd of 20,000 . to in the Les Invalides building complex . A total of 20,000 people attended the race . Kpgjhpjm 16:31, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
- Please change but lost his advantage to DiGrassi on the run to the first corner . to but was passed by DiGrassi on the run to the first corner. Kpgjhpjm 16:36, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
- Please change but retained his hold on third position . to but managed to retain the third position in the Championship . Kpgjhpjm 16:46, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
Background and preparation[edit]
1st paragraph[edit]
- Please change Coming into the race from Long Beach 3 weeks earlier. to After winning the previous round at Long Beach 3 weeks earlier , Kpgjhpjm 03:07, 5 August 2018 (UTC)
- Please change and Jerome D Ambrosio for Dragon had seven points less in the battle for the position. to , seven ahead of Jerome D Ambrosio of Dragon in the battle for third position . Kpgjhpjm 05:35, 5 August 2018 (UTC)
Second Paragraph[edit]
- No issues
Third Paragraph[edit]
- No issues
Fourth Paragraph[edit]
- No real issues , but I will be making a few tweaks .
Practice and Qualifying[edit]
First Paragraph[edit]
- In the first sentence remove the second occurrence of the word Sunday .
- The team names in the parenthesis is not needed . Kpgjhpjm 15:40, 5 August 2018 (UTC)
Second Paragraph[edit]
- No issues
Third Paragraph[edit]
- No issues
Fourth Paragraph[edit]
Fifth Paragraph[edit]
- @MWright96: : Can you say what is meant by lost time in the first second . I think it might be lost time in the first sector. Kpgjhpjm 15:48, 5 August 2018 (UTC)
Race[edit]
This is the section with problems in many Motorsports articles .
First Paragraph[edit]
- When the race started . Remove the word when and capitalise T in the .
Second Paragraph[edit]
- Remove the word Nevertheless
- A tweaks will be made by me here .
Third Paragraph[edit]
- In the previous paragraph , it is stated that Buemi and Turvey were battling for fifth place , so when Buemi passed Turvey, he moved into fifth . So when he passed Sarrazin , that move should be for fourth .
- Please fix this - if di Grassi was leading , Vergne second , Bird third , and as per above sentence Buemi fourth , then where did Prost come from .
Fourth Paragraph[edit]
- Change due to the tight track to due to the tightness of the track .
- Change used FanBoost to used his FanBoost - he can' use the FanBoost of others .
Fifth Paragraph[edit]
- No issues
Post-Race[edit]
- No issues
Classification[edit]
- Question : Why are names of some drivers in bold ?