Talk:2019 AFL Women's Grand Final/GA1
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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 04:39, 4 March 2020 (UTC)
Let's see if I get around to reviewing this over the weekend. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:39, 4 March 2020 (UTC)
Lead[edit]
- Per MOS:BOLDLINKAVOID, don't link AFL Women's Grand Final in the bold.
- 2019 AFL Women's season, the league's third season. <<<=== How about "2019 AFL Women's competition" to avoid repeating "season"?
- a record for an standalone <<<=== typo "an"
- I would suggest stating the score and/or something like... Adelaide took a big lead by half time.
- I would suggest following anterior cruciate ligament with "(ACL)" since the abbreviation is very commonly-used.
Background[edit]
- joined the competition in 2019 <<<=== specify "the AFL Women's competition"
- the competition was lopsided <<<=== I'd prefer "the conferences were unbalanced".
- The two teams that finished the highest in each conference at the end of the home-and-away season qualified for the preliminary finals. <<<=== Clarify opposite prelims (i.e. 1st in A plays 2nd in B).
- The Carlton Blues, which was <<<=== Should it be "which were"?
- much, much worse <<<=== one "much" is enough
- Can you link wooden spoon? (or state it means last place)
- The Crows went on to an impressive season, notching up seven games by an average of 40 points, with their only loss for the season being by a single point in the first round match against the Western Bulldogs, when they kicked an inaccurate 1.11, and finished on top of Conference A. <<<=== I would suggest splitting this into two sentences.
- In the above sentence, what does "notching" mean?
- At the end of the second paragraph, you're missing a sentence on how Carlton did during the regular season.
- In the lead up to the match <<<=== specify "their prelim"
- You could describe the image of Tayla Harris. (maybe "displaying her athleticism" or something...)
- misogynist internet trolls <<<=== How about "internet trolls who were regarded as misogynistic"?
Venue[edit]
- Can you link "minor premiers"?
- Brisbane Lions should just be Brisbane for consistency?
- a record for an standalone <<<=== "an" again
Teams[edit]
- Is "line ups" supposed to be two separate words?
Match summary[edit]
- 50-metre penalty caused by ===>>> 50-metre penalty on
- who were caught behind ===>>> who were caught too far from the goal
- high tackle from Sarah Hosking ===>>> high tackle by Sarah Hosking (to avoid two "from"s)
- One perfect kick later ===>>> One accurate kick later (I don't think "perfect" sounds encyclopedic)
- The crowd barely had time to cheer before she had delivered it to ===>>> She played on immediately (same concern)
- It did not stop Ponter, who marked a delivery from Jones inside the goal square for her second. ===>>> That did not stop Adelaide's control of the game, as Ponter marked a delivery from Jones inside the goal square for her second a minute later. (It doesn't sound like Ponter specifically was related to Scheer's injujry.)
- That looked like it for the quarter, but when the siren sounded Jones still had a free kick at goal. ===>>> After the siren, Jones still had one last free kick at goal.
- A pass from Forth and Phillips marked 40 metres out, and had her second goal of the match <<<=== The grammar in this sentence is a bit confusing. It doesn't sound like Phillips is the one kicking the goal.
- But then, Phillips went down ===>>> With a few minutes remaining in the quarter, Phillips went down
- In the image caption, you can state "best on the ground" instead of "player of the match".
Media coverage[edit]
- Okay.
Overall[edit]
- At times, the match summary reads more like commentary (albeit pretty good commentary!) than an encyclopedia article. I'm okay with most of it, but I pointed a few things out.
- Two Canberra Times links don't work: one and two
- No dab links.
- Well-sourced.
Overall, it's in good shape! Above are some suggestions. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:13, 11 March 2020 (UTC)
- Hawkeye7: Okay, passing! Do you want to list the article under the "Women in Green" sports section for articles promoted to GA in 2020? Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:29, 15 March 2020 (UTC)