Talk:2020 World Seniors Championship/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:26, 25 June 2022 (UTC)

• Why isn't 2020–21 snooker season linked in the lead?
  • It's a bit of an odd one, because it was the first event of the 2020-21 world seniors tour, which is a part of the snooker season. It being an amateur/Pro-Am event makes it difficult to place. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:20, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
    • World Seniors Tour says it was the third event of the 2019–20 season. So which one is wrong? Armbrust ^{The Homunculus} 20:45, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
• "pandemic, being broadcast" perhaps "pandemic and was broadcast" (and you might even need to say whether that was UK exclusive?)
  • I don't have a source saying that it was UK exclusive. The BBC Red Button stuff is available elsewhere in the world, but only for certain content.
• Online too?
  • Everything is online, so I think it's a bit moot. When we talk about "broadcasting", we do tend to mean that they have the coverage, rather than the media they use to portray that - otherwise we would say "stream" or whatever. If it was online only, that might be worth mentioning. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:20, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
• Could add a little more in the lead as to the format of the contest.
  • Added. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:20, 2 July 2022 (UTC)

• "place in 1991" could link 1991 season?
  • Linked event. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:47, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• "The event consists of" probably more accurate to say "The event is contested by..."
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:47, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• "at the Crucible Theatre in Sheffield, " for non-experts, it might be nice to note that this is also the venue of the World Snooker Championship rather than some deadbeat theatre in north England just picked to give these veterans a good time.
  • Agreed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:47, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• "11th edition of the World Seniors Championship" overlinked.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:47, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• "The event was... The event featured... " repetitive. Indeed, "event" is used ten times in that paragraph.
• "best-of-7 " etc, seven/nine.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:01, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• "The event was held ..." image caption needs a full stop.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:01, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• "White, defending the championship" comma after championship.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:01, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• Cuegloss link for break.
• "–3.[16][5] The second" ref order.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:01, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• "against Hendry, however, Hendry" jarringly repetitive.
  • fixed Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:29, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• "win 4-1." en-dash, and others, fix 'em all.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:01, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• No need to link common terms like "golf".
  • Considering there is a type of pool called "golf" I prefer to retain the link as it makes it very clear. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:01, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• "The field was made up of eight selected ranking event winners..." shouldn't this be in the overview?
  • Moved Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:29, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• Only four seeds, this needs explaining in the prose. Especially as it played out perfectly and all four seeds made it to the semifinals.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Might be worth noting that Tabb was referee for the final in the prose.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Why are century/50+ breaks in italics in the table?
  • It's something people do to show that both players had the same amount - but it's not explained anywhere, so I've removed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• "made during the event, Jimmy White made a 130 at the semi-final stage.[26]" made/made repeat. I would rephrase entirely, something like "Jimmy White made the only century break of the tournament with a 130 ..."
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:29, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
• Shouldn't ref 1 have the same publisher as ref 2?
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Same for other WPBSA sources?
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Ref 5, pp. not p.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Check websites aren't mentioned in ref titles, e.g. refs 6, 7 etc.
  • I think I got all these.
• Ref 8 publisher etc?
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Ref 9 publication date?
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Ref 12, link Sporting Life like you did with WPBSA in ref 2?
  • I've removed the links instead. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Ref 14 is a bare URL.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Ref 19 publication date.
• Ref 23, author etc, make it consistent with the other similar refs.
  • I've removed the non authors instead. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Ref 24 publisher?
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• Ref 25 spaced hyphen should be en-dash.
  • Done Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:06, 7 July 2022 (UTC)

That's it. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:53, 25 June 2022 (UTC)

Lee Vilenski ping. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:52, 1 July 2022 (UTC)