Talk:Active camouflage/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 07:06, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
Nominator: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) at 15:36, 14 December 2021 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on. I'll respond promptly to any questions. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:52, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

Prose

• The article has three paragraphs in the lead. Just one would be sufficient, given the length of the article. Suggesting to merge the paragraphs
  • Done.

• Lead: Animals achieve active camouflage both by color change and (among marine animals such as squid) by counter-illumination v. Prose: There are two mechanisms of active camouflage in animals: Counter-illumination, and color change — any reason for change in order or "Counter-illumination" and "color change"
  • Harmonised.

• "a wide range of background textures" — the prose does not make clear where this quote comes from
  • Repeated ref for clarity.

• WP:SANDWICHING in "In research" section

• Lead: during World War II v. Prose: Second World War — consistency needen
  • Fixed.

• of the United States of America — should be "of the United States"
  • Fixed.

• OLEDs is never used again in the prose. Do we need to specify the acronym?
  • Gone.

• Same with PAO
  • Gone.

• counter-illumination is linked twice in the prose.

That is it! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:28, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Images

• Images can take ALT text
  • Added.

• 1 non-free image is appropriately licenced.
  • Noted.

References

• Retrieved March 27, 2012 v. Retrieved 2017-01-09 — inconsistent date format
  • Fixed.

• Ref#27 — 2006 is repeated twice
  • Fixed.

• Ref#15 — bare url?
  • Formatted.

• 1046–8 — better would be "1046–1048"
  • Done.

That is it. Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:35, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Kavyansh.Singh – Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:01, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

There is still lot of inconsistencies in date formats in the references. Almost half are in "YYYY-MM-DD" format, while others are in "DD Month, YYYY" format. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:56, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

@Kavyansh.Singh: – Checked and formatted all of them. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:08, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Great, promoting! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 19:22, 8 January 2022 (UTC)