Talk:Aja (song)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 08:24, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Language English → Not needed.
"Aja" is the title track of Steely Dan's 1977 album by that name. → "Aja" is a song by American rock band Steely Dan from their sixth album of the same name (1977).
Like the other six songs on the album, → Irrelevant
it is in the jazz rock genre, → it is a jazz rock song
though it is regarded as tending strongly towards the former. → So, a jazz song with rock influences?
Musically, it is a tonally sophisticated and structurally complex work that was praised on its release as the most ambitious song the duo had ever attempted. → This is only attributed to one source, as some parts of the source don't quite match this sentence. I think it is being interpreted a little bit.
Why is so complex? What makes it complex?
escape the stresses of his life "up on the hill." → Are these lyrics?
Supposedly it was inspired by a relative of someone Fagen knew, → This clause is structured wrong, but it also reads fans written.
"tranquility that can come of a quiet relationship with a beautiful woman."[3] → Quotes are generally discouraged from being used in the lead.
and unlike many of the other tracks on the album, → There's only six, according to the first paragraph, so this reads a bit odd.
Both combined for solos → I don't understand this.
Gadd continued his, the first drum solo in a Steely Dan song,[5] in the song's tag, all recorded in just two takes. → This is really jumbled up.
It has been a favorite of the band's fans,[8] → If this is in the main body, then it doesn't need a citation here.
You don't mention the producer in the lead.
The whole lead is a bit messy. It needs rewriting.
A lot of the first paragraph of the Background section is not relevant. This song is from their sixth album, so we don't need info from 6 years previous as to before they formed. That is needed on the first, and perhaps second, album only. But this is a song article, so it's not needed even more so.
You would add The Village Recorder to the parameter for Recorded in the info box.

Done Daniel Case (talk) 05:34, 25 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Gary Katz produced, → Gary Katz produced the song,

Reworded. Daniel Case (talk) 05:34, 25 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Words such as 'Ultimately', 'Eventually', 'Supposedly' read really fan-written and you shouldn't use them.
Drum solo section opens with a quote to no prior explanation of what its significance is or who is meant to have said it.
Avoid one line paragraphs like in Reception and Samples.
There's an awful lot of content in the Recording and Composition sections. They are very detailed and very big. These could easily be condensed and streamlined.
You say its a fan favourite in the Legacy section but I can't see anything that supports that.
WhoSampled is not a reliable source. I checked at RSN and it was confirmed as such.
There are am incredible amount of quotes in this article. Some need to be paraphrased into your own words for sure.

Outcome

I'm sorry but I'm failing this article. I can see you've put a lot of time into this article, but I don't think it meets Good Article criteria. If I felt that the issues should be done within seven days, I would have placed on hold. But I think that many sections need completely rearranging and rewriting. And for that, i suggest nominating the article for a Peer Review or asking for it to be thoroughly copyedited by a member of the GOCE. — Calvin999 17:51, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]