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Think you should YouTube link the lyric video in the infobox? Like the case in the "Black Skinhead" infobox? Not done There is no template for adding lyric videos
"was handled by Kanye West," → "was primarily handled by Kanye West, as well as..." Done
Lines → lyrics Done
"top performing cut" – you can just say 'song' Done
You'll be fine just saying "numerous countries" instead of listing every single country it charted in Done and added top 20 information
You don't need the 'top 20', especially since you say "numerous" and not the total amount. "Numerous" is just fine – BeatlesLedTV (talk) 22:00, 15 April 2019 (UTC) Done[reply]
"Ty Dolla Sign also has vocals on Ye tracks" → "Ty Dolla Sign contributed vocals on other Ye tracks" Done
Link auto-tune Done
The sentence starting with "though..." I'm confused on. People believed it was Jeremih not Clemons? And mistook who for Valee? Francis?
Made more specific, look good?
"West first worked with Francis and the Lights on the" → "The two subsequently collaborated on the" – say "alongside Bon Iver" at the end (remove 'alongside West') Done
"on the tracks" → "on Ye tracks" (remove 'from Ye' at the end) Done
I had always wondered who sang the chorus. Now I know!
Just say "Clemons" at the start of the sentence after "ad-libs" (don't have to say full names every time) Done
"song, and he responds to critics too." → "as well as responding to critics." Done
What do you think of adding an image of Francis Starlite in this section? Done
'Daniels".' → comma outside quotes Done
This sentence "A screenshot..." reads weird
Fixed, look good?
"The track relies on a simplistic drum-led style for its production" → "The track's production relies on a simplistic drum-led style"; think you can separate the rest of the sentence or use something other than "and" Done
"At the time of West's decision" → wait, was it West's choice himself or did Def Jam/GOOD Music pressure him into picking it? Also, when you mean "at the time", do you mean the week of July 20 (or end of July)?
Made more specific, look good?
"Kids See Ghosts, and" → "Kids See Ghosts; West's last released music video..." Done
It says West's lyrics received praise. But what about "let me hit it raw like fuck the outcome/Ay, none of us would be here without cum." Critics praised that? That's definitely one of West's more "questionable" lyrics, along with the bleached asshole line from "Father Stretch My Hands", you know one that many of his fans joke about whether it's good or not.
Erased lyrics from what was "praised"
Any more reviews? Section seems kind of short. Done
Have all punctuation inside quotes (except songs) Done
Before "it was branded", say "However, not all reviews were positive." Done
"West takes a shot at" → un-encyclopedic; i'd use the word "diss" in a way and link it to diss track. While "All Mine" is obviously not a pure diss track, such as "Ether" and "Hit 'Em Up", these lyrics are definitely aimed at Kardashian, so I think the word "diss" would work well here Done
Entire first "paragraph" is only one long run-on sentence
"powered by its status of the most streamed song of the week" → reads weird in the sentence. Maybe "becoming (or became) the most streamed song of the week? Done
So far looks really good. I'll give my full review later today but I think I gave you a somewhat start. :-) – BeatlesLedTV (talk) 18:33, 15 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
BeatlesLedTV Yeah I've improved the lead now, expecting to know whether or not my sentence with "top 20" added after removing the countries works. --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:41, 15 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
All done. Great job on this! With a few tweaks this will be a GA in no time. – BeatlesLedTV (talk) 03:42, 16 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Not done There is no template for adding lyric videos
Done
