Talk:Allied logistics in the Kokoda Track campaign/GA1
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 04:16, 20 December 2017 (UTC)
This article has already passed Milhist A-Class review, so I doubt it will struggle to pass GAN. I'll just give it a quick once-over to see if there are any tweaks to be made. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:16, 20 December 2017 (UTC)
- suggest linking Kokoda Track campaign in the lead
- in the lead, air transport and native carriers are mentioned, then they are expanded on in the opposite order (carriers then air), perhaps reverse one or the other to improve logical flow?
- the 39th Battalion and 53rd Infantry Battalion
s - might be worth mentioning the 7th Division was AIF?
- when ANGAU is mentioned for the first time, it might be worth explaining what it was/did straight away as it is important to the native carrier part of the logistics story
- "This represented a dangerous situation" I assume due to the Japanese air attacks? Might be worth noting that?
- I would have thought speed for the Liberty ships should be given in knots and converted into other speeds rather than the other way round?
- Which Australian docks operating company was it?
- in general, the airfields section should probably be chronological in terms of when each one was started. For example, 30-Mile is mentioned (and linked) in the context of the bridge washout at Schwimmer before we even know it existed. This isn't an easy fix, I know, but maybe start by introducing all the airfields then breaking them down individually?
- Twelve Mile Drome was renamed Berry Drome - but we haven't heard about 12-Mile as yet, just 7, 3, 14 and 5? Related to the above point about 30.
- there is some inconsistency in compass directions, southwest, but also south east
- Shouldn't it be Ward's rather than Wards?
- From a grammatical POV, yes, but that isn't how it was named. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:15, 20 December 2017 (UTC)
- Not sure it's that cut and dried [1] and [2], but ok. I also saw it as Ward Drome on a Google Books search. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:32, 21 December 2017 (UTC)
- From a grammatical POV, yes, but that isn't how it was named. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:15, 20 December 2017 (UTC)
- Were there two different Colonel A.G. Matthews? If not, the second iteration can be changed to just Matthews, as he has already been introduced
- Where the narrative gets to the carriers, a bit more about ANGAU would be good at that point, as they essentially organised the carriers. Perhaps move the bit that starts "On 15 June 1942..." and the following para to this point
- when the drop zones are first mentioned in the context of the carriers, it is a bit of surprise, as air dropping and drop zones hadn't been properly mentioned before, it is a bit of chicken and egg problem, I know, but still...
- caused it to weigh
tmore - should probably explain that 21st Tpt Sqn was a US one, ditto 22nd
- The KNILM and RNEIAAF initialisations are unfamiliar, perhaps in full when introduced with parentheses after?
- I suggest inserting the para that begins "On 21 May, the 21st Transport Squadron" immediately after "Australia from Java." to maintain the flow regarding the US squadrons
- suggest a sentence fragment explaining what Kanga Force was
More to come Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:48, 20 December 2017 (UTC)
- one thing that stands out to me (it is probably more an A-Class or FA thing than GAN though) is there seems to be limited information on the logistic function of equipment repair and maintenance, both for Army and RAAF/USAAF. From what I've read, the 30th Brigade's LAD was set up at the Rouna Pass to fix vehicles that broke down on the one-way section of the vehicle track there. BTW, there is a good pic of a truck on the pass (albeit in 1943) on the AWM site (059646).
- link 3rd Field Ambulance (Australia)
- perhaps mention that Fairley was the Army's Director of Medicine and Mackerras was an expert on malaria?
- link Dysentery
- perhaps mention that Ford was Assistant Director of Pathology?
- sick men to
travelbe evacuated? - link Scrub typhus
- perhaps mention who Coates was
- suggest hyphenating the isbn for Kienzle for consistency with the rest
- Rupert checked the licensing at A-Class, so I don't propose repeating that process.
There's something weird about the way the campaign boxes on the right expand, they go off the right side of the page frame on both my monitors. Just wondering if it is just a Google Chrome thing or happens in general?
That's me done. Great job, really comprehensive. My only outstanding point is that one about equipment repair and maintenance, I suggest you see if you can locate anything on that before FAC. Placing on hold for the last few comments to be addressed. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:48, 21 December 2017 (UTC)
- Unfortunately, the book I need for that is Craftsmen of the Australian Army, and its back in Canberra. It will have to wait until I return. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 04:03, 21 December 2017 (UTC)
- No worries, as I said, more of a FAC thing than GAN. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:27, 21 December 2017 (UTC)