Talk:An Elephant Makes Love to a Pig/GA1
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Reviewer: CTJF83 chat 08:57, 12 December 2009 (UTC)
- Per WP:NFCC remove at least one, if not both pictures ie 3 and 8
- "and steals a blood sample from Stan and the boys flee" are they hastily fleeing due to Mephisto stealing stand blood, or does the word need to be changed to leave?
- source for the original title? I guess it looks like you guys are putting one reference at the end of each paragraph for the whole thing? Is this standard, I've never seen it.
- That's right, if it pertains to all the information in that paragraph, I use one citation at the end of the paragraph to encompass it all. I'm pretty sure this is correct according to WP:FOOTNOTE ("Material may be referenced mid-sentence or at the end of a sentence or paragraph, as needed for clarity."), and this is how I've handled citations in pretty much all of my GAs and FAs and it's worked out fine. That's what I did in this case. However, I found a fairly new book source with this info, so I added that citation instead. — Hunter Kahn (c) 14:42, 12 December 2009 (UTC)
- I know I personally have a problem doing this, but can you try and copyedit the 2nd paragraph of the cultural references section, so it reads less like a list of facts in paragraph form, and flows better. The 1st paragraph flows together very nicely
- Reference 4, can you try and find a different source, preferably from Comedy Central. If Comedy Central doesn't have anything, ref 5 will be sufficient
CTJF83 chat 09:46, 12 December 2009 (UTC)
- Note: Just so you know, I added just a tiny bit new info, and I moved the Home Release section below Reception, which is based on feedback we've gotten at previous GANs. Sorry I forgot to do this before. You can see my changes here. Thanks! — Hunter Kahn (c) 14:59, 12 December 2009 (UTC)