Talk:Anstey Hill Recreation Park

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Good Article review

This is a well-written article. I know that it looks like I've left a long list, but my concerns are fairly minor. I have gone through the article and done some copyediting for minor issues. Some of my remaining concerns about the prose are:

1. There is inconsistency throughout the article over whether is it Newman's nursery or Newman's Nursery. Since it seems to be the name of a location, I believe that nursery should be capitalized. Done
2. From the third paragraph of the lead, "crossing the park the Adelaide-Mannum pipeline" sounds awkward. It seems to need another verb (crossing the park is the Adelaide-Mannum pipeline?). Done - reworded this
3. From the third paragraph of the lead, "Ellis cottage on one of the earliest homes in the area." This is not a complete sentence, as it has no verb. Done + inconsistent capitalisation of this. as "Ellis Cottage" seems to be a proper name in the context I've capitalised it throughout.
4. At the end of the second paragraph in the "Today's park" section, "there are none planned as of 2006". Is this the most recent information available? If so, I would switch "are" to "were". Done - were is correct. 2006 is the latest official statement on the issue.
5. In the final paragraph of the "Today's park" section, "parts to the east in 1981 and much of the park again in the 1983 Ash Wednesday fires". This needs to either be joined to the beginning of the sentence as part of a list or have a verb or two added. Done - reworded
6. In the second paragraph of the "Foundation" section, "insufficient rehabilitation work had been completed". Insufficient for what? Done - insufficient removed and changed to "did not meet the standard required by the Planning Authority" as this meets the gist of the source.
7. In the second paragraph of the "Newman's Nursery" section, "and show exhibits from 1871". This needs a verb. Done (hopefully) - reworded.
8. Later in that paragraph, "all three diplomas on offer for their exhibition line". I don't understand what this means. What is a diploma in this context? Done as far as I can. The source is unclear and the news articles of the day assume it's self-evident for readers. By the context I'm putting in quotes as it seems to be a name for a prize level ( like 1st prize)
9. Later in that paragraph, "Victoria park Nursery". "park" should probably be capitalized. Done
10. In the third paragraph of the "Newman's Nursery" section, "John Payne’s gully". Is this the name of the gully? If so, "gully" should be capitalized. Not done - it's not named on any map as such, just in one source and appears descriptive rather than a proper name. From the context I am assuming that the land was purchased, by the Newman's, from John Payne; so it is "the gully formerly belonging to John Payne" rather than "named after John Payne"
11. Later in that paragraph, "The latest owner removed". Could "the latest owner" be rephrased? Perhaps "The new owner". Done - agreed "new owner" is better
12. In the first paragraph of the "Mining and quarryig" section, "They supplied dressing stock". Who are "they"? And while I'm thinking of it, "quarry" should have a wikilink the first time it is used in this section. Done - "They" is now "the quarries" + first instance wikilinked
13. In the section paragraph of the "Mining and quarrying" section, the wikilink for "flux" doesn't seem right. Perhaps linking it to Flux (metallurgy)? Done yes + linked "smelting" as the bit on this in the flux article is sketchy.
14. From the "Ellis Cottage and Rumps Bakery" section, "A Mr Daw built rumps Bakery". "A Mr Daw" sounds awkward. Done dropped as no source gives me his first name + sentence combined with the following one
15. Later in that section, "Since the late 19th century, the building was frequently used". Is it still used for this purpose? If so, I would rephrase this as "the building has been used". Done - changed to "Until the mid 20th century". No years are listed in the source but this fits with the facts.
16. In the first sentence of the "Water filtration plant" section, "an area at the top of the park, adjacent to lower North-East Road was chosen". Who chose it? This sentence would also work better in the active voice (eg. [Name] chose the area at the top...). Done - passive voice removed + some cruft taken from the sentence.
17. From the second paragraph of the "Roads" section, "William Haines was district clerk for Tea Tree Gully for 35 years from 1867 and Member of Parliament for Gumeracha from 1878 to 1884. From 1862 he had lobbied..." The first and third uses of "from" are a little awkward. Is there a better way to say this? Done third is now "since" and the years converted to "(18xx–1xxx)" format
18. The first item in the "Notes" section would be easier to understand if it were written in complete sentences. Done

As for the references, do the references at the end of paragraphs cover everything in the paragraph? It would also be good to add a reference for the end of the first paragraph of the "Today's park" section.  Done Each reference covers the preceding text from the previous reference mark so the end-of-paragraph ones simply cover the end of the paragraph, not the entire paragraph (unless there is only one ref for the paragraph eg: last bit of "Mining and Quarrying"). I've added the reference for the last bit of the noted paragraph - left out originally for some reason.

I have no concerns about the breadth of coverage, stability, neutrality or images. I am placing the article on hold for one week to allow the prose issues to be addressed and a response to be given about the references. It would be greatly appreciated if you could indicate which issues are addressed by crossing them out like this or placing a  Done check after them. Please let me know if you have any questions. Best wishes, GaryColemanFan (talk) 23:24, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Thanks for this review - give me a couple of days (just got back from camping holiday today) - Peripitus (Talk) 11:20, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

Think it's all done but will come back and read through tommorrow again. - Peripitus (Talk) 12:43, 23 April 2008 (UTC)

You've done a great job on this article. My only remaining concern is the phrasing of the second sentence of the fourth paragraph in the "Today's park" section: "Much of the reserve was burned in 1980, just eastern parts burned in 1981 and most of the park burned again in the 1983 Ash Wednesday fires..." Does "just eastern parts" mean that only the eastern parts were burned? If so, I would recommend removing the "just": "Much of the reserve was burned in 1980, the eastern parts were burned in 1981, and most of the park burned again in the 1983 Ash Wednesday fires..." And while I'm thinking of it, Ash Wednesday should have a wikilink. Sorry to drag the review on for one small phrasing issue. If I had access to the information, I would fix it myself. GaryColemanFan (talk) 02:25, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

All of my concerns have been addressed. To summarize the GA criteria, this article is well-written, broad in coverage, verifiable, neutral, stable, and appropriately illustrated.

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Best wishes, GaryColemanFan (talk) 03:26, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

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