Talk:Anthony Moon/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 01:00, 7 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I have no idea why this is still waiting for a review. Don't have much time to but I'll get a review up as soon as I can. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 01:00, 7 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

"which is later a focus to one of the storylines" a focus of one
"Anthony first appears when he poses as a member of the council" what council? Those that watch Eastenders I'm sure would know that but a lay reader has no clue. Done
"Eddie sells them on for £8000" sells them on what? Done
"They make up the following day and Jodie leaves and Poppy leaves " can this be re-worded? Reads odd gramatically. Done
"which leads Donnie attempting" which leads to Done
"Phil Mitchell (Steve McFadden) say it makes a change" says it Done
"Anthony first appears on 25 July 2011." appeared Done
"Lapinskas appeared as Anthony in EastEnders E20, before" no comma needed here Done
I'd actually call "Introduction, casting and characterisation" the main section, since there's only one section in creation, so that title can just be cut and moved. Done
The above section feels quote heavy to me. See if you can convert at least a bit of it to your own words. For that matter the entire article seems to veer a little bit towards that. Done
The blockquote in the Eddie and Michael section needs a cite. I assume it's the one right before but let's be safe on that. Done
"Lapinskas deemed his character "pleased that somebody likes him", " cite needed Done

There are quite a few fixes to make, but they're not too tough. I'll put the article on hold for five days so the issues can be fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:26, 7 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:43, 8 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]