Talk:Benson raft/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 16:10, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

Criteria

1. Prose  On hold

2. Verifiability  On hold

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations ✓ Pass

7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass

Comments

1.

• " Southern California from the Pacific northwest and Canada." - capitalize Northwest and link Pacific Northwest. It's a specific region

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:07, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• "t was a transportation method to transport industrial quantities" - It's a touch repetitive to write "transportation method to transport", how does The rafts were used to transport industrial quantities ... sound?

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:12, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• "John A. Fastaben was the key raft-building specialist that Benson hired as a construction supervisor" - First mention of Benson in the lead, probably best to give his full name at first mention

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:17, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• Be consistent with Southern California vs. southern California, I can see an argument for either capitalization

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:23, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• " open ocean on the west Coast of the United States" - Either west coast or West Coast

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:23, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• " Columbia river inland from the Pacific coast" - Capitalize River

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:27, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• "traveling only thirty miles south into" - Use the {{Convert}} template to get kms, too

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• "assembled consisted of fir logs" - Link fir

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• " in the Pacific ocean" --> " in the Pacific Ocean"

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:38, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• "anywhere from 4 to 6 weeks to assemble" - MOS:NUMERALS

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:41, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

2.

• "The assembly involved 175 to 250 tons of chain" - Source states 125 tons.

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:41, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

• "http://archiveswest.orbiscascade.org/ark:/80444/xv31893/op=fstyle.aspx?t=k&q=WAUFordJFPHColl701.xml" is the correct URL for ref 22.

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk)

• Ref 28 should be capitalilzed "Journal of Forest History", not "Journal of forest history"

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk)

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A little work that needs done, but very good work on improving this article since the first review. Hog Farm (talk) 17:48, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

@Hog Farm: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:49, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

@Doug Coldwell: - Passing the article. Heads up - you'll probably get a message on your talk page stating that it failed, though. There's a bug with the bot that runs the GAN stuff that causes it to read a pass when the article failed a previous review as a fail. Hog Farm (talk) 20:14, 9 June 2020 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.