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"Not long afterwards Keng Djim calls Aij Tjeng and Gwat Nio to his deathbed, where he confesses that he has recently learned that Marsiti was his daughter from a native njai he had taken as a youth, and that she had recently died.". Who has died? Marsiti, or, Marsiti's mother?
" As he investigates, he sees Lily.". He investigates what?
How's this?
Fine.
"After investigating, the Sims discover that "Lily" is in fact Aij Tjeng's daughter...". Who are the Sims?
Sim Bian Koen's mother and father; in Chinese names like this, the family name is the first one. Changing to "Bian Koen's parents" might be clearer for Western audiences, but then it would be repetitive. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:55, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Tha's an interesting info I was not aware of. I understand stating parents again would be repetitive; but won't that be easier for a larger audience? I have no particular leaning in this issue; it's up to you.
I think I'll keep Sims, as they are referred to as such twice here. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:13, 10 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"When he comes to at his home..." "to at"?
"come to" means 'to become aware'. I've changed the article wording to avoid the "to at" construction.
LoL! That was a funny reading I did. Did not realize the context was still his passing out! Anyway, now reads fine.--Dwaipayan (talk) 23:28, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"...and after discovering Roosminah's background they have Roosminah take over Lily's identity.." Who is Roosminah? That name has not been used in the plot before.
"Born to an ethnic Chinese textile merchant and his native wife" What is native here?
The wife was native Indonesian, although I've yet to find out if she was Javanese or Sundanese (more likely). As there was no Indonesia at the time, having "native Indonesian wife" would be incorrect. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:51, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"By the time he wrote the novel, was an active proponent of Buddhist theology". Does this need a "he" after the comma? I am not sure.
Added "Kwee". "He" would work too. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:51, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"he also wrote extensively on themes relating to native Indonesians and a keen social observer." The phrase after and (a keen social observer) does not match with the verb in the sentence.
Added "was"
" he also wrote extensively on themes relating to native Indonesians and a keen social observer. He also read extensively, in Dutch, English, and Malay." Repetitive sentence structures.
"Kwee wrote that he was inspired to write the novel after hearing his daughter singing an English version of the French song "Mimi d'Amour". He was struck by the melancholic lyrics and decided to write a "sad story or stage play" based on it. However, he did not begin the writing process until February 1927," The sentence structure of the third sentence implies as if he was inspired by the song quite a few years earlier, but the preceding sentences do not mention any specific year of that incident.
Neither does Kwee. I doubt it would have been much earlier than 1925, but that would be OR. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:51, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Sidharta suggests the ultimate result was inspired by..." A descriptor for Sidharta? He first appears in this sentence.
Moved from below (also, "she") — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:51, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"... as a serial in Kwee's magazine Panorama" He was editor/publisher?
Both, based on my readings.
Ok, but does this need elaboration? Just Kwee's magazine would be ok? Also, Panorama, besides being a magazine, seems to be a publication house, too, right?--Dwaipayan (talk) 23:31, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
WorldCat thinks so. I think it should be clear enough, but if you have a suggestion for introducing the info gracefully I'm all ears. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 01:13, 10 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
well, gracefully doing this is difficult! First, we don't need to change this expression in the lead. Second, I am suggesting a change in the Reception section as follows: ...originally published in 1927 as a serial in Panorama, a magazine edited and published by Kwee. It was complied as a book later that year and published by the Panorama publication; this printing sold out. What say? Even if the Panorama Publication bit is not added, that the magazine was edited and published by Kwee, I feel, is important.--Dwaipayan (talk) 02:04, 10 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I think "Kwee's magazine Panorama" is perfectly clear. I've added a short clarifier that Panorama was also a publishing house and owned by Kwee. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:15, 10 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Although I would have had reservations agreeing with you on "Kwee's magazine" as a stand-alone expression, now that you have added the bit on the publication (...published by Panorama Publishers – also run by Kwee) in the succeeding sentence, the two sentences together makes the reading better, I feel. So, this is resolved for now.--Dwaipayan (talk) 13:27, 10 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The book has since proved to be one of Kwee's most popular novels..." When was it first published as a book?
"A new printing, adapting the 1972 spelling reform, was included in the second volume of , an anthology of Chinese Malay literature" Extra punctuation.
D'oh, missed Kesastraan Melayu Tionghoa dan Kebangsaan Indonesia
KITLV : needs full name.--Dwaipayan (talk) 15:54, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Added "Press". The publisher is never referred to as "Royal Netherlands Institute of Southeast Asian and Caribbean Studies Press" — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:51, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
This looks quite solid to me and ready for FA; it's a great article on an interesting-sounding work. As a caveat, though, I should warn you that my brain's a little wonky this morning, so this may not be quite up to usual copyediting. A few notes outside of the self-explanatory:
"schools that focused on modernity" -- just a little vague --they studied modernity as a subject? Used modern learning techniques? Worked in the vernacular instead of a classical language?
"Kwee wrote that he was inspired to write" -- avoid repetition of "write"
I delinked Buddhism as the name of a major religion per WP:OVERLINK
Good luck with this one, and thanks as always for your massive contributions! -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:51, 22 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks a lot Khazar, got both of those! (Have one more source, a translation of Claudine Salmon's Literature in Malay by the Chinese of Indonesia, on the way, which may offer some more explanation of the themes) — Crisco 1492 (talk) 12:55, 22 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Done so far. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:51, 9 April 2013 (UTC)