Talk:Bronx–Whitestone Bridge/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:57, 22 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Comments great article.

  • Don't need that reference in the lead, the only one. It's expanded upon in the main body, it's not a direct quote, it's fine to leave it to later.
  • " by Othmar Ammann and " unusual name, perhaps introduce as "Swiss-American architect"?
  • "and the bridge was widened " no need to say "bridge" just after you've already said 'bridge'.
  • "was also renovated in 1988–1991. " any ideas why? I know it's just the lead but it might be nice to know why here.
  • " the MTA Bridges and Tunnels," reads very odd to my ENGVAR ears, I would drop the "the", but I guess you can counter that with TIES?
  • "he bridge has a total length of 3,700 feet" not according to the infobox.
  • "735 feet (224 m) Thus, " missing a period.
  • "art deco" is normally "Art Deco".
  • "an art deco streamlined " would imagine that to be hyphenated.
  • "1988-1991[9][10] and in 2003-2005." en-dashes for those year ranges.
  • Be consistent on how you (pipe)link "The Bronx".
  • "53 feet and" convert.
  • "incorporated in 1909[20] and two " awkward and jarring ref placement, just send it to the end of the sentence.
  • "New York" is piped to a redirect.
  • "cost $25 million to construct" inflate to modern terms, I imagine it would be mind-boggling.
  • Don't pipe Triborough Bridge to a redirect back to itself.
  • "The Triborough Bridge Authority.." Use the abbreviation you gave us last section.
  • "had beat out the " "beat out" seems poor tone, why not just "beaten" or something less colloquial?
  • Could link Groundbreaking?
  • " led by Mayor La Guardia" just check with MOS:BIO if we need to capitalise mayor here.
  • lamppost or lamp post?
  • "San Francisco–Oakland Bay Bridge.[62][4][5]:115 " order.
  • Be consistent with the format of your refs to the World Fair.
  • "The Tacoma Narrows Bridge employed " we can just go with "It employed".
  • "led to a misconception" are we sure? did it really just lead to a "belief"?
  • Huge reliance on the word "would" which becomes sometimes painfully repetitive, when all you're doing is talking about the past tense. Mix it up a bit.
  • "completed by 2007.[104][64] " ref order.
  • "started in 2008[106][64] " ditto (but avoid such horrible placement).
  • "he Queens approach, which cost $109 million,[109] was completed in May 2015,[107] During the renovation of the Queens " repetitive again.
  • [136][111] order.
  • Unspaced end-dashes in that table.
  • Don't quote a range when a range doesn't exist!
  • How is $9.50 in 2019 $8.69 yet in the April 2019 row be just $9.50?
  • Link to NY Portal is a dab.
  • Avoid SHOUTING in ref titles.
  • Avoid spaced hyphens (they should be en-dashes) in ref titles.

That's my first run through. It's a great article. I imagine someone else coming in assessing it against the baseline GAN would just pass it. I'm sorry to give you more than that, but this could easily run at FAC. I hope some of the comments I have help should you decide to take this further. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:53, 22 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review. I've solved most of these, except for the following:
  • Unspaced end-dashes in that table. - I will fix these soon. Just have to go over the articles with similar tables with AWB.
  • Don't quote a range when a range doesn't exist! - How do you mean?
  • That was a typo (wrong year in one of the templates). It is now fixed. epicgenius (talk) 15:44, 23 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • How is $9.50 in 2019 $8.69 yet in the April 2019 row be just $9.50? - That must be a mistake. $8.50 in 2017 is equal to $8.69 today, and that's how the table reads.

epicgenius (talk) 01:44, 23 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Do you have any further comments on this nomination? epicgenius (talk) 15:48, 26 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I don't know right now, I'm on holiday (hence the notice on my talkpage) so I'm really only getting time to do easy things like review main page items, and then I fall asleep. I should be back in the saddle much more enthusiastically in a few days time, apologies for keeping your waiting. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:29, 26 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I got some quiet time before I fall asleep! More than happy with the changes, I'd like to see this at FAC, it's easily good enough, but in the meantime I'll pass it to GA. Nice work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:16, 28 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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