Talk:Champion of the Raj/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs)) 04:11, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- @Jaguar: Grabbing this for a review.
Lead[edit]
- Replace the semicolon after factions with a colon
- I would suggest linking Mogul, Sikhs, and Marathas (but this is merely a suggestion and not a requirement)
- Remove “mostly” and just say “mixed reviews”
- Be specific with “various aspects of gameplay”. While this is the Lead, every sentence should be specific and not ambiguous so specify what aspects of gameplay are being praised.
- Put a semicolon between “gameplay” and “however”
Gameplay[edit]
- Image needs an alt. and I would recommend using "upright"
- I would reword the second sentence to avoid repetitive language and be more concise: (Before starting the game, the clay can pick a player-character and side to play.)
- Link Maruthras, Gurkhas, Maharajah, and Sikhs (Again a suggestion, but you can tell me why you would prefer not linking these)
- Link or specify the meaning behind “chokey” as I am not entirely sure what you are referring to (I could be missing something very obvious).
- Oops. I didn't know what a chokey was either, but I looked it up and it appears to be slang for "prison cell" (which is what I was expecting, but I thought it was a formal use for something). It's actually Anglo-Indian slang! I've just changed it to "prison cell". JAGUAR 21:24, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- Just say “1800”. The “the year” part is unnecessary and redundant
- Specify what you mean by “status”
- Move the reference on the “game hunting session” to the end of the sentence.
- Put a comma after “however”
- Replace “has died through assassination” with “is assassinated”
Background[edit]
- Remove comma after England
- Great job with this section. I am very impressed with the research put into this section and the overall article.
Reception[edit]
- I really like how you separated this section into two clear paragraphs with clearly defined topic sentences.
References[edit]
- While not required for the nomination, I would highly recommend archiving all the links when applicable to avoid dead/broken links in the future.
Final comments[edit]
- @Jaguar:This article is already in great form; my comments are more focus on smaller details and once they are addressed, it will be a quick and easy pass. Aoba47 (talk) 04:39, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- @Aoba47: thank you for the review! I've addressed all of the above. The majority of the references were scans, which can't be archived, but I did the rest. One of my main interests are in British India and I had high hopes for this game, but when I watched a playthrough video of it on YouTube it turned out to be so bad. I'm glad the article doesn't appear that way, at least! JAGUAR 21:24, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- @Jaguar: Great work! And I am glad that my comments could help in some way. I am very impressed with the work put into this article (especially as it is an older game and a majority of the references are scans. I am sorry that you are disappointed in the game, but at least you could make something great out of it! Looking forward to reviewing and reading your future working on here. ✓ Pass
- GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail: