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Copy-edit tag?

Hi User:Shalor (Wiki Ed) You've added a 'needs copy-edit' tag. I recently did this for the article - maybe not well enough! Can you say which sections you think need editing (and maybe move the tag to the section(s) that need attention, rather than the whole page), or do you think the whole page needs the work? Fugitivedave (talk) 13:39, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

  • Hi! Some of our students recently added to the article, specifically this material. Their content isn't bad but it did read a little bit too much like an essay at times, so it's something that I felt needed to be worked on for tone and flow. I'd tagged it a bit for myself, but if you want to work on it, that would be awesome - it looks like you've been watching over the page, so you would likely know best how to work it into the article better. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:35, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
Thanks User:Shalor (Wiki Ed) - I won't be able to get to it for a couple of months, so feel free to preempt me. I might move the tag to the sections that most need the attention. Your students have been great - especially on Child soldiers in Africa. Fugitivedave (talk) 21:36, 14 March 2018 (UTC)
  • Sounds good and thanks for the compliment! I'll definitely pass it along! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:53, 15 March 2018 (UTC)

Proposed split from main article: 1) history 2) reintegration

The history and reintegration sections have some good content but are very long on this page. Proposed: 1) to move most of the content from the history section into a new page, 'History of children in the military', and 2) to move most of the content from reintegration section into recently created page 'Rehabilitation and reintegration of child soldiers', leaving summaries on this page as usual. Thoughts? Fugitivedave (talk) 12:05, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

That seems sensible to me. At 15,000 words the article is way too long, and they seem appropriate areas to hive off into articles of their own - where justice can be done to their topics rather than squeeze them in under this. Gog the Mild (talk) 15:33, 22 March 2018 (UTC)
There is already an article on Rehabilitation and reintegration of child soldiers which largely duplicates the section in this article. I am moving much of the section from this article wholesale. I will then drastically slim the section in Children in the military, referring and linking to Rehabilitation and reintegration of child soldiers as the main article. Any help, or watching for any errors, would be appreciated. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:41, 22 March 2018 (UTC)
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