Talk:David Evans (RAAF officer)/GA1
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Reviewer: Nick-D (talk) 04:26, 25 June 2011 (UTC)
Comments[edit]
This is a very good article. I've got some comments for areas where it could be improved, but none are major:
- "a VIP captain" - this sounds rather more glamorous than the job probably was! Something like 'an aircraft captain' would work better
- Is there any significance to Evans being "the very last name in the 1947 Air Force List"? - does this mean that he was the most junior officer in the RAAF at the time? (or something else)
- Yes, it means most junior -- perhaps I'll reword it to that and not bother with the direct quote, eh?
- I've tweaked the article's wording to clarify that he was a member of RAAF Squadron Berlin Air Lift
- "his duties including an exchange posting with the Royal New Zealand Air Force from May 1951" - do we know when this exchange was completed?
- Yes, July 1953 -- but I see that might not be obvious as written, will tweak a bit.
- "Evans also dabbled in politics" - 'dabbled' seems a rather mild term for this - Eden-Monaro is a 'bellwether seat' and candidates put their all into winning it
Assessment[edit]
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- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
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- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
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- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
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