Talk:David Webber (basketball)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 23:12, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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I don't have a lot of comments, this article is in really good shape. Here are my few:

Comments

• Per MOS:ALLCAPS, the titles of newspapers in the citations should be converted to title case.
  • Done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:06, 27 August 2023 (UTC)
• The first paragraph of the lead has four straight sentences that start with "He played" "He was" "he holds". The repetition of "he" could use some improvement.
  • OK-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:56, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• The one-sentence paragraph in "College career" should be merge into the previous paragraph. The previous paragraph and he one sentence both relate to CMU.
  • Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:57, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• The "Professional career" section should be combined into two paragraphs to break up the short, choppy paragraphs after his NBA aspirations. First paragraph: NBA, second: everything else.
  • Thx-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:59, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
• Chris Webber isn't linked in the body of the article, even though it is linked in the lead. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:12, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
  • linked-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:09, 26 August 2023 (UTC)

References

• I don't have access to ProQuest, so I'm going to AGF on those, which make up most of the references in the article.
• Spot checked: Refs 1, 5, 11, 16, 19, 23, 29, 32, 34, 35, 38, 41.
  • Ref 1: what makes TV Guide a reliable source?
    • I believe the TV Guide magazine is a WP:RS, so I just extended that reliability to the website.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:41, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Ref 5: how was this accessed by you? No link.
    • I was unable to access this through the Chicago Public Library website like other ProQuest sources. However, a search result made it clear that this was a source with encyclopedic content. I contacted the Detroit Public Library, who wanted to charge me for the access. Then I contacted Ann Arbor District Library and explained who I am and they gave sent me this source by email.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:20, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Ref 16: how was this accessed by you? No link.
    • Also unable to access, but the search result blurb showed that the article supports the content that this citation supports.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:23, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Ref 19: is this supposed to support the statement that he redshirted?
    • Yes. What is the issue?-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:25, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
  • Ref 41: what makes statscrew.com reliable?

Nothing too big, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:12, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Everything looks good, passing. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:43, 28 August 2023 (UTC)

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