Talk:Diana Fountain, Bushy Park/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 21:15, 24 May 2011 (UTC)

• Wikilink "London" and "England" in the opening sentence.

I thought either would be overlinking per Wikipedia:OVERLINK#What_generally_should_not_be_linked. But since you've raised it I've linked London, hopefully that will avoid any confusion with London, Ontario. Jonathan Cardy (talk) 07:03, 25 May 2011 (UTC)

• "contains a 400' diameter pool surrounded by lawns" - Don't write "400'", either put 400-foot or 400 foot. After that, convert 400 feet to metres.

Fixed. Jonathan Cardy (talk) 07:03, 25 May 2011 (UTC)

• "have been attributed to his rival Francesco Fanelli,[3], and also to Le Sueur;" - Why is there a comma before and after the reference?

Fixed. Good spot. Jonathan Cardy (talk) 07:03, 25 May 2011 (UTC)

• "Charles I had the Longford River dug from the river Colne to Hampton Court Palace in order to power the palace water features, and in 1713 Sir Christopher Wren utilised this water to give the complex a set of gravity fed water spouts. In the 297 years after the statue was relocated to its current site in the park many of the waterspouts became clogged and only four were functioning before the renovations of 2009/10." - Unsourced
• "In the 297 years after the statue was relocated to its current site in the park many of the waterspouts became clogged and only four were functioning" - Add a comma between "park" and "many".
• "only four were functioning before the renovations of 2009/10." - Write-out "2009/10", because I cannot tell whether that is October 2009 or 2009-2010.
• "The Diana Fountain is at the junction of two long straight tree lined avenues, Lime Avenue and Chestnut Avenue which cross at right angles. The Junction is off centre to both Avenues." - Unsourced
• "Chestnut Avenue crosses Bushy Park from Teddington to Hampton Court Palace and contains a road with wide lawns on both sides. There are multiple rows of horse chestnut trees on both sides of Chestnut Avenue." - Unsourced
• "Lime Avenue is grassed and has multiple rows of lime trees on both sides of it, The longer of its two sections runs between The Diana Fountain and White Lodge." - Unsoucred;
• in addition, why is the word "The" start with a capital letter (two occurrences)?

The only examples I could see of this were the sentences that started that way. Jonathan Cardy (talk) 07:03, 25 May 2011 (UTC)

• None of the references to online sources are in the cite web format.
• Reference #1 has the wrong title; it should be "Diana Fountain, Teddington".
• Reference #3 also has the wrong title; it should be "Bushy Park - A Playground for the People".
• Reference #12 is a "dead-link"
• Reference #14 is missing the date and author. In addition, the article has the wrong title, it should be "D-Day planning at Bushy Park".
• Reference #15 has the exact same issues.
• Reference #16 has a similar problem, although the name of the author is unknown.

Drive by comments by SilkTork

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

• Clear, pleasant and readable prose.
• Lead gives a useful overview, but could be developed a bit further per WP:Lead - example information that could be included - the discussion on the name, Longford River, the move to Hampton Court Palace.
• There are possibly too many images per Wikipedia:Layout#Images; consider if the images are appropriate for a gallery per WP:Galleries.
• Article is stable and contains a reference section.
• Broad coverage - article is interesting and informative. I question the vistas section - is this a little too much detail for a general encyclopedia entry?
• Images are legal and pass GA copyright criteria, though there are too many of them to meet the "appropriate" criteria. The quality of some of the images is not good - some are blurred or misty - but that is not a GA issue.
• I've not checked sources.
• On the whole a pleasant, attractive and interesting article. SilkTork *^{Tea time} 09:24, 11 June 2011 (UTC)

No edits to the article in two weeks, perhaps it should be failed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:42, 28 June 2011 (UTC)

Articles hasn't been touched since both reviewers noted issues, so for now this fails GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 00:13, 29 June 2011 (UTC)