Talk:Domestic violence in India/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Piotrus (talk · contribs) 13:10, 4 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
A. Prose: 1) some unnecessary constructions, like "as it is sometimes called". 2) Weasel: "it has been argued" - by whom? 3) Insufficient ilinking (WP:BTW). From first para: no links to notable concepts Domestic violence. 4) "a 1995-1996 PubMed study" - don't cite publisher, cite the author. B. MoS issues with lead - it does not summarize the article properly, it introduces new information not repeated in text, and is too short. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 05:40, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
Some refs are not properly formatted, please use cite templates. Ex. "Domestic violence plagues women worldwide, study says - SFGate" - missing everything but the title. Several clearly newspaper articles are not linked, despite the fact that almost certainly they are online. Improper capitalization of THE CRIMINAL LAW (AMENDMENT) BILL. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 05:40, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
1) Background section is grossly insufficient: it consists of a general remark that this is a worldwide problem, and a note about a 2010 movie of little relevance. 2) A few sections discuss domestic violence in general, rather than in India, for example "Background" and "Physical violence" sections seemingly have nothing to do with India. 3) The article focuses on women; despite the fact that abuse of children and elderly is a major part of domestic abuse, too. A para about abuse of males would also be helpful. 4) Focus is problematic. Background section is about nothing specific; "According to Unicef's Global Report Card on Adolescents 2012, 57% of boys and 53% of girls in India think a husband is justified in hitting or beating his wife" sentence in factors is seemingly random. 4) Missing section on history (has the domestic violence and attitude toward it changed?). 5) Regional differences are discussed, but how about differences by age cohort, education, socioeconomic status, caste, religion...? --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 05:40, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
No images at all. If no photographs can be obtained, some graphs or maps should be possible create. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 05:40, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Overall: On hold. Seems to require some substantial expansion before being comprehensive. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 05:40, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Pass/Fail:
Failing due to no response. I am finding those student GA "we will stop caring as soon as the course ends" increasingly irritating. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 08:54, 13 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]