Talk:Donald William Kerst/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:23, 24 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.

Lead

  • suggest who was working should be who worked
  • a brief description of a betatron is needed at the end of the first para
  • suggest He was then employed at the
  • is there a link for toroidal?

Early lifecheckY

Betatron

  • for a year in x-ray tubes and machines seems informal
  • suggest in his efforts to create
  • suggest The result of these efforts was the betatron

World War II

  • suggest which he brought back
  • suggest consuming/employing most of the world's supply, but this may be technically incorrect. use and using in such close proximity is a bit repetitive
  • Los Alamos Laboratory is a proper noun, all words should have initial caps

Later lifecheckY

1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
  • there are several overlinks, betatron and plasma physics in the lead, neutron reflector, enriched uranium and University of Wisconsin in the body
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
7. Overall assessment. Placing on hold for seven days for prose and minor MOS issues to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 09:52, 25 December 2014 (UTC) Passing GAN, well done. Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 11:45, 25 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]