Talk:Dragonet

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range[edit]

Does "western Indo-Pacific" mean the Indian Ocean, or what? —162.119.64.112 23:07, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

General Comments[edit]

1) Reproduction section
→The section contains different elements of reproduction/mating, and it definitely can be divided in to subsections (courtship, spawning, etc.)
→Part about sexual dimorphism should be located in a different section, or be placed properly in within the other text in the Reproduction section in order to fit appropriately.

2) Citing problems
→Citation needs to be made after each sentence in which claims are made, not all at the end of the paragraph

3) Clarifications
→Reproduction: "Both male and female dragonets have been observed in displaying..." Displaying what?
→Reproduction: What exactly is a water column?
→Reproduction: What do you mean by "one reproductive day"?

Jyn0309 (talk) 04:39, 29 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Suggested edits[edit]

General edits:

  • Hyperlinks are needed
  • The organization of sections is lacking
  • Paragraphs get somewhat large; it would serve to cut them up
  • Citations should go at the end of specific sentences, not all at the end of a paragraph.

Specific edits:

  • Summary paragraph
  • Insufficient. Add information inline with what is in the article below it.
  • Description
  • Types of fins and whatnot really need to be defined or at least hyperlinked.
  • There is a dearth of citations. Fix that.
  • Reproduction
  • This section is too clumsy in structure. Cut it into 3-4 smaller paragraphs.
  • Citations should be strewn throughout the text at the end of relative sentences, not all clumped at the end.
  • Aggression
  • Fix the title
  • Consider expanding
  • Hyperlinks!
  • Fix citations
  • Feeding
  • Hyperlinks!
  • Fix citations
  • Locomotion
  • Is this sections strictly necessary?
  • Hyperlinks!
  • Fix citations
  • Aquariums
  • The image screws up this section completely.

Bakerb4379 (talk) 00:29, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Suggested Edits[edit]

Should have some information on what kind of habitats they prefer

Reproduction: uses some terms that aren’t defined (water column), maybe should consider defining it or linking it to a page about water columns if there is one

Reproduction: what does “one productive day” mean?

Reproduction section seems to run on, maybe consider making it more concise or splitting it up into three or so paragraphs

All sections: shouldn’t have all the citations at the end of the paragraph, they should be at the end of each sentence to which they correspond — Preceding unsigned comment added by Gopara (talkcontribs) 04:39, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Recommended edits[edit]

Great job!! To raise to a Good article status, I recommend:

  • Add "Distribution and habitat" section. It will be better if you can add a picture showing their distribution.
  • Add "Taxonomy" section.

Hami910311 (talk) 20:39, 21 November 2013 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 128.252.110.213 (talk) [reply]

General Comments[edit]

Very good article! Contains lots of descriptive information but here are a few suggestions to help

  • Physical Description: Second paragraph of this section has no references for all the information presented there
  • Reproduction: Some of the information presented here are a little bit too in-depth, especially the numerical values. Maybe shorten it a bit and reduce unnecessary information
  • Feeding: Likewise, some information such as expelling food after eating are a bit too in depth or unrelated to the topic at hand
  • The later sections could maybe be combined with former sections, or expanded upon
  • Locomotion: This section seems unnecessary and too detailed for wikipedia
  • Defense: perhaps move this section up to the competition/aggression section? It could fit pretty well in there
  • In the aquarium section, the picture seems unnecessary and throws off the flow of the article. Perhaps removing it might be best

MLiu19 (talk) 21:28, 21 November 2013 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 128.252.102.204 (talk) [reply]

Suggested Edits[edit]

  • Try to add more sections/information to give a more comprehensive view of the fish.
  • Try to add more images.
  • Defense section is a little short. Try to incorporate elsewhere or include more information.
  • If possible, try to break up the Reproduction section. It's a lot of text.

VAleles (talk) 17:37, 22 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]