Talk:Elizabeth Olsen/GA1

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead[edit]

  • Per MOS:ORDER, hatnotes should go right below the short description.
 Done Chompy Ace 02:01, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Award among other awards" sounds repetitive. Maybe "accolades"?

Early life and education[edit]

  • "in musical theatre camp" → "in a musical theatre camp"
    • I'm not sure this holds the same meaning. The reference does not specify that it was one camp; I think the intention was to generally say she spent time attending camp the way people would say they went to sleep-away camp as children. I also believe the appropriate phrasing is at camp as opposed to in camp, so I made the change. I hope this suffices. KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • This source (#12) does not mention Campbell Hall School.
    • I replaced the Marie Claire ref with The Hollywood Reporter, but I couldn't find a source that verifies for what grades she was there, so I removed that part. KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Shouldn't "Off-Broadway" be written as off-Broadway in the article?

Career[edit]

  • Distribute the 3 references after Endgame.
  • "comedy drama" → "comedy-drama"
  • Distribute the sources after "slyly sympathetic".
  • The references after "respective reviews" should be swapped (NPR before Vox).

Personal life and acting credits[edit]

  • "Olsen stated" sounds off and the grammar tool I'm using marks it as an error - reword?
    • I changed the phrasing to neutrally state that she has been an atheist since the quote already lets readers know that she made a statement about it. KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Change "Girl In Car" to simply "Girl in car" per MoS.
 Done Chompy Ace 02:03, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Other than that, the one-paragraph sentence and the filmography table look good.

Awards and nominations[edit]

  • WP:SMALLTEXT says the text font should not be made small in tables. For accessibility purposes, I suggest making the small notes actual notes.[Note 1]

References[edit]

  • All 92/92 sources are archived.
  • #20 is missing an author.
    • The Daily Telegraph ref does not list an author. Maybe I'm missing it? KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
      •  Done Yep, I missed it. I was looking at an archived link that did not contain the author's name. Sorry about that! KyleJoantalk 02:47, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • #23, #68, #74, and #76 are missing access-dates.
  • Links to Vulture should go to Vulture (website) per WP:NOTBROKEN.
 Done Chompy Ace 01:59, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Progress[edit]

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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