Talk:Elle Leonard/GA3
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 23:51, 25 January 2024 (UTC)
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Rationale for quick-failure[edit]
I have elected to quick-fail this nomination. In just my prose review - before even doing spot-checks or a copyright check, I found problems with just about every sentence in the article. I now have serious doubts about the notability of the article subject. There are many citations to RS, but as elaborated below much of the article veers away from Leonard and much of the content about Leonard is about for example posts on Twitter about playing recreational basketball with her husband. –♠Vamí_IV†♠ 09:29, 11 February 2024 (UTC)
- #Background and early life has very little to do with Leonard herself. Why do we need to know how big the building her grandmother supported was, or that she was a homecoming queen?
[...] she (listed at 5 ft 11 in (1.80 m))
Why does it matter how tall she was?[...] brother, Max Bielfeldt (listed at 6 ft 6 in (1.98 m))
Why does it matter how tall her brother was?[...] for being one of the area's interesting sibling basketball performers.
This should use a quotation, rather than saying in Wikipedia's voice that central Illinois is a basketball desert.On January 14, 2010, Leonard scored 25 points against LaSalle-Peru High School.[16]
Is there any consequence to this?She was a 2010 Peoria Journal Star
Missing italicization.Her younger brother, Max, was highly touted for basketball, but Elle claims that she could beat him at one-on-one until he could dunk.
Who asked?In the March 30, 2010, announcement that the Peoria Times-Observer would cease operations on April 28, 2010, both Elle and Max Bielfeldt were thanked for having lives that made for great content.
This should be or use a quotation. It is not encyclopedic.Her younger (high school class of 2014) sister, Matti (listed at 6 ft 1 in (1.85 m)), excelled in volleyball (179 kills, 87 digs, 79 blocks and 30 aces as a senior) and eventually joined the University of Illinois team.
This article is not about Matti.Their first date was five hours long at the University of Illinois gym. The pair spent two hours of shooting basketball and then three hours of talking, since she refused a dinner date.
Do we need to know this?As Leonard's girlfriend during the 2012 NBA draft ceremony, she was regarded as having notable sex appeal compared to wives and girlfriends in attendance.
Why is this, and the quotation from the article in the citation template, included? What value does it add?After three years of operating solely as a food company, the brand marketed merchandise and then subsequently expanded to female sportswear.
This sentence is missing a citation.Leonard can be seen keeping her basketball skills sharp on social media.[37]
What value does this statement add?- Most of #College is #Personal life content.
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