Talk:Equestrian statue of Philip Sheridan (Washington, D.C.)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Caponer (talk · contribs) 08:55, 26 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

AgnosticPreachersKid, I will begin a thorough and comprehensive review of this article within the next 48 hours. Please let me know if you have any questions or concerns in the meantime. -- Caponer (talk) 08:55, 26 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, thanks! APK whisper in my ear 08:58, 26 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

AgnosticPreachersKid, I've completed my review of your article and it looks like it meets the majority of criteria for passage to Good Article status. I've left a few comments and suggestions that must be addressed before final re-review and passage to Good Article status. You've done a wonderful job pulling all these sources together to craft a well-written narrative of this D.C. landmark. Thanks for all your hard work! -- Caponer (talk) 10:28, 26 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lede

Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section, the lede summarizes content from the three subsections of the "History" section and the "Design and location" section.
It may be notable to include that veterans of both the Civil War and Spanish–American War were present at the dedication, in addition to the President.
I suggest expounding further in the final sentence of the lede to reiterate that the statue and surrounding park are owned and maintained by the National Park Service, a federal agency of the Interior Department, per the "Historic designation" subsection.
Since the lede is separate from the content of the prose below, you can remove the parenthesized NRHP initials.
This section is well-written and all content is verifiable and internally sourced below in the prose.
Done APK whisper in my ear 10:50, 26 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

History
Background

I would suggest rewriting the first sentence as: "Philip Sheridan was a career United States Army officer who was instrumental in securing Union successes..." Or something to this effect.
You may want to include the year of Sheridan's death (1888) in the first paragraph when his death is mentioned.
I also suggest wiki-links to Mount Rushmore and the Battle of Cedar Creek in this subsection.
This subsection is well-written and all content is verifiable and internally sourced within the prose.
Done APK whisper in my ear 10:54, 26 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Dedication

This subsection is well-written and all content is verifiable and internally sourced within the prose. I have no suggestions or comments, other than the inclusion of the veterans' attendance in the lede.

Historic designation

I suggest spelling out National Register of Historic Places and wiki-linking it here since it is the first usage in the article's main prose, then placing the parenthesized NRHP afterward.
This subsection is well-written and all content is verifiable and internally sourced within the prose.
Done APK whisper in my ear 10:54, 26 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Design and location

For the geographical description of the statue's surroundings, I would utilize the following USGS topo map citation to cover your bases:

Washington West Quadrangle, District of Columbia–Maryland–Virginia (Map). 1 : 24,000. 7.5 Minute Series (Topographic). United States Geological Survey. 2011. OCLC 777027791.

It probably wouldn't hurt to repeat that the statue and traffic circle are in the Sheridan-Kalorama neighborhood of D.C. here. I'm wondering if you should also mention that Sheridan Circle is within the Embassy Row. Your source for the Massachusetts Avenue Historic District should cover this mention if you choose to include it.
Done If the first sentence seems oddly worded, let me know. APK whisper in my ear 11:00, 26 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

AgnosticPreachersKid, I did some slight rewording of the location sentence to the following: "The bronze equestrian sculpture is at the center of Sheridan Circle, a traffic circle located at the intersection of 23rd Street, R Street and Massachusetts Avenue NW within the Embassy Row section of the Sheridan-Kalorama neighborhood." Let me know if this works with you! Everything looks good to go, and it is hereby my pleasure to pass this article to Good Article status. Congratulations on a job well done! -- Caponer (talk) 08:58, 27 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! APK whisper in my ear 09:00, 27 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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