Talk:Florianus/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 13:00, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

A couple of points:

• I have copy edited. Could you check and flag up anything you are not happy with.
• Probus appears rather suddenly, with no explanation as to who or what he was. Could you insert a sentence briefly giving his background to that point?
•  Done
• Tacticus. In the lead he is "allegedly assassinated", in the article he "died... allegedly as a consequence of a military plot". How about 'allegedly assassinated as a consequence of a military plot'?
•  Done

Optional prose points for your consideration:

• "allowing him to utilize guerrilla warfare to wage a war of attrition rather than a straightforward war." Consider 'a straightforward confrontation.' to avoid two "war"s in close proximity.
•  Done
• "Probus launched skirmishes around the city". I am not sure if, grammatically, one can launch a skirmish. Consider 'raids'.
•  Done
• "In total, Florianus' reign lasted only slightly more than 88 days." reads clumsily to me. Perhaps 'lasted less than three months'; or 'less than ninety days'?
•  Done
• "However, Florianus soon had to deal with the revolt of Probus, who rose up soon after Florianus ascended" Two "soon"s in close proximity.
•  Done

Gog the Mild (talk) 16:29, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

• @Gog the Mild: Believe I have fixed all points. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 20:51, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

Fine work there. A good tight little article. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:58, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

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