Talk:Frank Dux/GA1

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Reviewer: Adityavagarwal (talk · contribs) 04:58, 28 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, this looks like a wonderful article. Kindly feel free to revert any changes/mistakes I make as I review this article!

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~~Linked Kumitsu and Ninjitsu. Could you check if I have linked them correctly and if you do not agree any among those should be linked, feel free to revert!~~

I'm happy enough with that at this stage.

~~Is there any reason why Kumite has been put in double-quotation marks?~~

Not really. Removed.

~~Do we know the names of the countries that he was sent to a mission on in Southeast Asia? It might be better to list them if so, or if you do not find them that should be fine too.~~

I didn't come across that information in any of the sources I read. It's my understanding Dux is deliberately vague about the details. When he sued Soldier of Fortune, Dux was asked to go into details about his covert operations but he refused, telling the court that if he did he, his family, and everyone in the court would be murdered.

As it seems a covert operation, he might not have mentioned. Adityavagarwal (talk) 08:58, 28 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

~~For consistency with other names, the B. of B. G. Burkett should be expanded too.~~

I can't actually find a reference to what the B stands for. His Wikipedia article is just entitled B. G. Burkett so I think that would be the most appropriate thing to refer to him as even if we did know his full name. For a comparison, her article is entitled J. K. Rowling because that's what she is commonly refereed to. Accordingly, links to her article should be written with this abbreviation, even though her full name is known.

"Lt. Cmdr. Larry Simmons" If I were to guess the abbreviations, Lt. would be Lieutenant and cmdr. would be Commander? If they are used frequently in military it seems fine. Although, if they are rare abbreviations, for easier understanding, it should be expanded.

Good point. I've linked it to Lieutenant commander.

~~In the lead, ninjitsu is without capital whereas elsewhere it is capitalized. Any reason for that?~~

No, good point. Fixed.

~~Also, should it not be ninjutsu instead of ninjitsu?~~

You're right. Fixed.

"Koga Yamabushi Ninjutsu" this is unclear. Is it instead "Dux states that he was introduced to Ninjutsu and was trained in Koga by a Yamabushi named Senzo "Tiger" Tanaka"? Also, why is Tiger in double-quotation marks? Is Koga the Koga family or the place? If it is the Koga family, it should be mentioned clearly as it could be misinterpreted for the place. Also, if so, Koga should be linked here instead of in the Career section.

Tiger is his nickname. It's not uncommon to feature nicknames in double-quotations in the middle of an actual name. I added many sources to the article and read every source that was in the article before I overhauled it, except the one that backs up that statement (Can Ninjitsu Make You the Ultimate Warrior). Accordingly I am accepting good faith for the two sentences this source backs up. As this is unclear (and in my opinion of not much importance) I've decided to just simplify it to saying he was trained in ninjutsu. Damien Linnane (talk) 07:58, 28 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

~~Are you able to find a picture? If not that is fine as well, although if you are able to it might make it better.~~

Not one that has been released into the public domain, and since he is still alive it's my understanding it wouldn't be possible to justify using one of the many images of him available from a google search under fair use rationale. Also I don't want to contact him myself and ask for one as quite frankly he appears to be mentally unstable. Damien Linnane (talk) 09:45, 28 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I've since found two free images of other people referred to in the article and have added them. Damien Linnane (talk) 12:33, 31 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

~~Are you able to find a wikilink to John Johnson and John Stewart?~~

No. They don't appear to have articles. For example John D. Stewart (journalist) and John Johnson (reporter) are not the same reporter/journalist features in this article. Damien Linnane (talk) 01:20, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

You have done amazing work on this article. It is eligible for a GA status, congratulations! Adityavagarwal (talk) 20:00, 8 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]