Talk:Fraternal fruit-eating bat

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 09:34, 10 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Happy to review this one. First of all, can we get a photograph? There are some free photographs on Inaturalist: [1]. Not all of them are suitable (they should not have the non-commercial restriction). You can filter by licence. This one, for example, is already under CC BY 4.0 and could just be uploaded to Commons: [2]. For the other photos, I think you would have good chances if you ask the authors to adjust the licence for a particular photo so that it can be used in Wikipedia. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 09:34, 10 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • smallest species in the group of large Artibeus. – What is "the group of large Artibeus"? The "the" implies that this group should be known to the reader, which is not the case. Is it a clade within Artibeus? *Within the genus, it was historically considered to be part of the Jamaican fruit bat complex. However, it is sister to the hairy fruit-eating bat, – I don't understand the "however" here. Do you mean "instead"?
Added the species in the group. Also replaced however with instead.
  • The species is considered to be representative of a historical connection between bats on the west Andean slope and Middle America. [1] – I think this needs more context, and I can't follow. How can the species be representative for this connection if it is only found in South America?
Added context.
  • The ventral fur is pale and appears – "ventral" is very technical, can we just say "underside"?
Done.
  • frosted due to the silvery-gray tips of each hair. – Tips in plural mean that a single hair has multiple tips?
Done.
  • horseshoe linking to the horse article.
I've removed the link, as there isn't any article on the bat type of horseshoe.
  • forearm, tibia, metacarpals, and phalanges – these all link to bones, which is not precisely what is meant here?
Clarified.
Done. AryKun (talk) 15:13, 10 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I miss mention of the facial stripe pattern that are listed as diagnostic in your main source. Diagnostic features are very important, since they indicate how to distinguish the species.
Added.
  • bimodal – can we just say "breeding twice a year"?
Done.
  • parturition – can we replace this with "egg laying" or similar?
Replaced with "gives birth".
  • Tumbesian Center – The center of the Department of Tumbes? But why then is it in title case?
It's a place with high levels of endemics, clarified in text.
  • roosts – link?
  • on the IUCN Red List due to its large range, commonness, – you didn't have info about commonness in the article, though. Your main source says it is often the most abundant bat, I think this could be mentioned?
The article does state commonness in the Status section. AryKun (talk) 02:59, 11 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • That is everything! Let me know if you need any help with the photograph. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 19:52, 10 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I also added the image. AryKun (talk) 03:13, 11 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]