Talk:Gunday/GA1

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Reviewer: Yashthepunisher (talk) 16:57, 27 November 2017 (UTC) ·[reply]


Initial Comments. Yashthepunisher (talk) 16:57, 27 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • In the infobox, replace the 'screenplay' template with the 'writer' one.
 Done as asked.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:46, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why not mention Chopra's name before Singh and Kapoor's in the lead? Since she is their senior.
 Done as asked.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:46, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove "the most powerful outlaws of their time" bit from the synopsis, looks puffer-ish.
 Done as asked.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:46, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...the effects of war-caused immigration". Link 'war', since its unclear which war the film is talking about.
I'll leave this to Krish.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:45, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He wrote the film as a tale of the consequences of the struggle of two outlaws against the system". This looks awkwardly written.
I'll leave this to Krish.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:45, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • The soundtrack was produced by Sohail Sen and Irshad Kamil, the latter writing the lyrics." This can be re-written as The soundtrack was produced by Sohail Sen and the lyrics were penned by Irshad Kamil.
 Done as asked.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:46, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Instead of writting "..the highest-grossing February Bollywood release of all time." mention its position on the higest grossing films of that year.
I'll leave this to Krish.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:45, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • The film received two nominations at the 60th Filmfare Awards: Best Choreography for the song "Tune Maari Entriyaan", and Best Action (winning the latter). Rewrite this sentence as The film won the Best Action Award at the 60th Filmfare Awards and was nominated for Best Choreography for the song "Tune Maari Entriyaan".
 Done as asked.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:46, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per WP:FILMPLOT, trim the plot section and bring it down between 400 and 700 words.
@Yashthepunisher: Trimmed it further. Do check it again.  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 09:54, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
It still needs some trimming. Yashthepunisher (talk) 11:36, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 4 doesn't confirm the "who became well-known criminals" bit.
  • Alt texts need fullstop.
  • "Gunday was the last film narrated by Yash Chopra" --> narrated to Yash Chopra.
  • Remove the quote following this sentence. It doesn't add much to the articles info.
  • "who both had made their film debut with the same production house". Remove this bit, seems redundant and trivial.
  • "..Kapoor would play Bikram and Bala would play Singh". Who will play who?
  • Authors name is missing from ref 9.
  • "Masala!" fails WP:RS.
  • "Singh injured himself after falling from a height" --> Singh was injured after falling from a height.
  • At ref 20, The Times Of India --> The Times of India. Also, the authors name is missing here.
  • The first two sentences of the second para in the filming section should be merged.
  • "While filming, a huge crowd gathered to watched the stars and the shoot." How is this encyclopedic?
  • "The filming was done over a period of over 110 days and was completed on 25 September 2013." The word 'over' is used twice here.

Soundtrack

  • Fix redirect of KK.
  • Remove 'also' from the last sentence of first para.
  • 'Planet Bollywood' fails WP:RS.

Release

  • Ref 48 doesn't support the "receiving a positive reception" claim.
  • "The film was promoted by its stars in major cities across India." Its a very mundane fact.
  • In the second para, several sentences begin with 'The film'. Please rephrase.
  • Delink India, per WP:OLINK.
  • "People from Bangladesh asked the production house to apologize.." Apology is demanded, I think.
  • Remove YRF's apology statement. Articles should be as concise as possible.
  • Ref 58 doesn't support the prose claim.

Box office

  • The use of INRConvert should be consistent.

Accolades

  • The publisher of ref 84 is Big fm.

That's it. Yashthepunisher (talk) 13:55, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Yashthepunisher: Except for the references 9, 48, 58 and 84, as well as the INRConvert bit, the rest have been resolved hopefully. Krish, all my edits were done in good faith and you can feel free to modify/revert them if need be. Thank you. :-)  — Ssven2 Looking at you, kid 14:10, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
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  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
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  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
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  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
  • I have performed a couple of edits. The article looks in a good shape now. Yashthepunisher (talk) 15:30, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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