Talk:Half-Decent Proposal/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 comment! 15:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will review soon. Ruby2010 comment! 15:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments[edit]

One dab link
"the tenth episode The Simpsons' thirteenth season." missing word
"was pitched by seres' co-creator and executive producer" typo
"tensions among The Simpsons' staff" apostrophe not needed
"some of who conidered it" typo
Make sure first mentions of Lenny and Springfield are wikilinked
"All cacti resemble Marge to Homer, and Lenny mournfully points out Mount Carlmore that he carved one blissful summer." Not sure I understand the second part of this sentence. Lenny carved Mount Carlmore?
"Meanwhile, Marge leaves Artie furiously, only to discover what Homer had done when she gets home and finds he is not there and that he had left a tape behind." You can probably delete the second part of this sentence (bolded). Or reword (verging on run-on sentence currently)
"and anti-Homer subliminal messages (though Artie seems to reveal himself soon after the messages start and wakes up Marge)." Don't quite understand this sentence either. How does Artie reveal himself?
Indicate Tim Long is a consulting producer
" This revalation garnered scrutiny" typo
Make sure sentences with direct quotes end with citations
""Half-Decent Proposal" features the return of Artie Ziff, and the first time since the season 2 episode "The Way We Was" that the character was portrayed by American comedian Jon Lovitz." awkward phrasing
"On August 24, 2010, the episode was released part of The Simpsons: The Complete Thirteenth Season DVD and Blu-ray set. Al Jean, Ian Maxtone-Graham, Matt Selman, Tim Long, Dan Castellaneta, Lauren MacMullan, Matt Warburton and James Lipton participated in the audio commentary of the episode." Needs citation (just use audio commentary citations here too)
"manages to be worse that that dire movie [Indecent Proposal]." typo on your part, or author's? (maybe add [sic]?)
"calling the it "late to the party." missing word
"The Simpsons makes an Indecent Proposal themed episode" make sure The Simpsons and Indecent Proposal are italicized
Format publishers considently (use IGN for instance, not tv.ign.com)

The article is well-researched and interesting, but has a lot of grammar mistakes. They're mostly all easy fixes, so I'll place the review on hold for seven days while they are addressed. Thanks, Ruby2010 comment! 16:18, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I think I've addressed all concerns but if there's anything more, let me know. Thanks again! Queenieacoustic (talk) 17:12, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Almost forgot, but make sure to add a brief ratings summary to lead. Then it will be all set for gaining a GA ranking. Thanks, Ruby2010 comment! 17:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:07, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Looks great. Nice work! Pass for GA. Ruby2010 comment! 19:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]