Talk:Hartlepool United F.C./GA2
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:56, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
Ok taking a look now...
- The top para in the lead is a two-sentences only - have a look at some football club FAs - the lead should be 2-4 substantual paragraphs
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when West Hartlepool Rugby Club went bust- "bust" is possibly a tad colloquial..."bankrupt"?
- ...
but his successor Billy Horner couldn't stop the rot- "stop the rot" also a tad colloquial...
following a tumultuous time on and off the pitch- not explained...?
In the history sections, anything about any prominent players during this time would help.
The Club crest should be a single para not three separate sentences. Also maybe rename it to Colours and crest and discuss the strips over the years as well.
Not bad overall - shouldn't need too much work Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 09:53, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for taking a look @Casliber.
- Looking at some of the FAs for club articles, they seem to vary a bit. This article's opening para has two sentences whereas features articles such as Ipswich Town have one, York City two and Gillingham three. I could extend it further if it is important though.
- Done
- Done
- Not particularly sure what this was referring to myself so I've removed it
- I'll extend the Brian Clough part and maybe add something about McGovern/Allon/Houchen.
- I've merged it into one para. I'll add a section on the strip too at some point today
- Thanks Michaeldble (talk) 13:14, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
- Hello @Casliber, I think I've implemented most of your feedback now. I've extended the colours and crest section and added a bit about John McGovern. The only bit I haven't done yet is the first para of the lead but I wanted to get your thoughts on that first. Please let me know what you think. Thanks Michaeldble (talk) 23:41, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
- I must admit I'm not thrilled by a small 2-sentence sub-paragraph at top but concede it's been accepted on football FAs so will not make a big deal about it. I was unaware of the Michael Maidens story -worth a few sentences, including the goal of the season and death. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:16, 20 February 2024 (UTC)
- I've extended the Michael Maidens section just now. Michaeldble (talk) 15:39, 20 February 2024 (UTC)
- I must admit I'm not thrilled by a small 2-sentence sub-paragraph at top but concede it's been accepted on football FAs so will not make a big deal about it. I was unaware of the Michael Maidens story -worth a few sentences, including the goal of the season and death. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:16, 20 February 2024 (UTC)
- Hello @Casliber, I think I've implemented most of your feedback now. I've extended the colours and crest section and added a bit about John McGovern. The only bit I haven't done yet is the first para of the lead but I wanted to get your thoughts on that first. Please let me know what you think. Thanks Michaeldble (talk) 23:41, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
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- Pass or Fail: - right, I think we're there. A nice read. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:40, 21 February 2024 (UTC)
- Excellent! @Casliber Thank you very much for your help Michaeldble (talk) 00:59, 21 February 2024 (UTC)